"Invalid Item" is a poem about a world within worlds. In that world/universe, this person gets to call all the shots. It is a self-affirmation mantra of sorts where people either get with the narrator or they are foe.
My favorite verse was the second where you assign these capabilities like superpowers. I almost wish the theme was less about your universe with more focus on these powers to detect enemies, be able to tune out voices, to vanish from reality.
I would change one word...'sans'. It didn't seem the right fit in that place where you could easily use 'no'. Otherwise, keep on writing and sharing more stuff.
Brian
10th newbie review. All WDC Angel Army reviews for September complete. The views expressed in this feedback are my own.
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