Good evening, Kaz. I found this prologue (or the 1st Chapter) to be very interesting and engaging. I like fantasy stories with magic and clues dropped along the way. There were several instances of misused or missing commas, but that didn't deter me from reading. A first draft mistakes will happen.

I was tickled by the action of the quill when James Wright tried to stuff it under the cushion and sit on it. The characters are described in a way that lets the read decide if they are likeable or not. Mrs. Jenkins is likeable. Mr. Jenkins, a hardworking delivery man wanted nothing more than to sit in his lounge chair with a draft and watch television. It is when he yells for Mrs. Jenkins to bring him another drink that made him sound as if he treated Mrs. Jenkins more as a servant than a caring spouse. James considered all his options, should he stay, should he speak with Mrs. Jenkins or take a chance stepping into the portal to see where it would take him. Nice hook at the end to get the reader to turn the page to continue reading.

Nicely done. Keep writing.

GaelicQueen
Member of the Angel Army