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 |  | Luminescence  [13+] Random things to be aware of.  |
| (5.0)| Hallo! I thoroughly enjoyed reading this one. It made me feel warm and fuzzy. I like the introduction about the current scenario, and then how you go in to what you wish for. The writing is sincere and comes from the heart. There's just one slight seeming-contradiction I noticed. You say you've never celebrated a birthday with just friends and would like this to be your 21st, and then you go on to say that you'd like to celebrate that with family as well. I'm not sure if I've misunderstood something or you've contradicted yourself, you could read the piece again and see if you like. I was wondering what the note at the end would be. I thought perhaps it would speak about Lord Hanuman and why you choose to visit this deity on your special day. Instead I found a little disclaimer / apology that made me smile! I am not sure if it was necessary, but if you feel you need to say it, it's fine. Maybe consider mentioning something about Lord Hanuman ... ? Thank you for sharing this heartwarming piece!  Reviewed by a member of "The WDC Angel Army"  My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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You responded to this review 09/06/2021 @ 1:49pm EDT