Of Predators and Prey [18+] inspired by the nursery rhyme "The North Wind Doth Blow" |
Hello LeJenD' Looking Up, I am reviewing this story/poem for the following contest: "Monsters Under The Bed - CLOSED" by Lilith of House Martell Prompt: "The North Wind Doth Blow" 1. Keep "poor thing" in the second line of your poem. 2. Maintain the Syllable count: 10, 10, 10, 10. 2a. You may write up to three stanzas, a total of 12 lines. 3. Put your own dark twist on the poem. Your version can be mysterious, dark, or horror. This review has no bearing on the outcome of the contest. Reviewing the entries gives me the opportunity to take a closer look. Overall Impression: Woohooo! Three murders in three stanzas! How fun is that? Great job keeping it dark! Each quatrain could have stood on its own, but I like the way the drama kept building and enjoyed the poem a lot! Grammar and Mechanics: - 10 syllables per line? Line 7 has 9 syllables. - "poor thing" kept in the poem? - Does the poem have a dark spin? No spelling or grammar errors were noted. Closing thoughts: As a small thank you for your entry, I am enclosing a few gift points. Kindest Regards, Lilli Thank you for sharing your work. ***Disclaimer*** The comments herein are just my humble opinions. Use whatever is useful; discard the rest. I'm not an editor, proof-reader, or any of the like. When I read and review, I am reading as a 'reader', to be entertained. You know your work better than anyone else! If I make a suggestion or a comment, it is meant in the spirit of 'helping' and I welcome the same when people review my work. My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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