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 |  | Eyes of Slate and Limping Gait  [13+] A confused stranger thinks he's found the architect of a revolution to free their country.  |
| (5.0)| A fascinating tale. Stirs all sorts of undercurrents, not least those of Jesus' childhood. I had some trouble getting into the story (more on that in a moment) but then was hooked and drawn in until I couldn't escape. Which is a lot to happen to a reader in a piece as short as this but it's true. You have a way with words and know how to make something compelling. Grey eyes are a part of that, I think. There are various shades in grey (not sure if there are fifty but there ya go) and I'm sure we imagine the most striking of them when reading. I see them as very light, impossible to ignore. A powerful image. And so to my difficulty in getting into the story. It's the profusion of 'J' names. It takes a while to sort out who is who and the fact that all the names begin with J doesn't help. If this isn't a necessary part of the story that I've missed, I would definitely think about changing that. Otherwise it's a well told, striking tale that is hard to put down. The Jesus connection occurred to me when the stranger identified Jasper as the future leader of the revolution and was confirmed when Jamie made it clear that she knew about that. It had me wondering whether Jesus had similar experiences. In fact, maybe that's the reason for the J names. Anyway, I love the story. Wonderful tale!    Beholden  My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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You responded to this review 09/18/2021 @ 10:23pm EDT