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Hello proton69 ,

I am reviewing this story/poem for the following contest:
"Rising to the Challenge! - CLOSED"   by Lilith of House Martell

Prompt: Start your poem with this phrase: "It begins..."
Line Count: minimum 12 lines

This review has no bearing on the outcome of the contest. Reviewing the entries gives me the opportunity to take a closer look.

Overall Impression/Emotional Impact:

I really like the first sentence of your poem! You made good use of the prompt phrase.

Your poem has an optimistic theme and I like the destiny aspect of it.

Grammar, Spelling and Mechanics:

Where is played it's symphony?
This should read 'its symphony', not it's.
It's is the contraction for 'it is'.

I hope and frustrate everyday-
The way the word is being used here, it should be every day, not everyday.

Everyday, one word, is an adjective meaning "used or seen daily," or "ordinary."

Every day, two words, is an adverb phrase meaning "daily" or "every weekday."

Closing Comments:

Thank you for your entry and keep writing!



Thank you for sharing your work.


My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .