Hello JessTheMess

Greetings from "WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group" !

Welcome to WDC! I am reviewing your short poem "When I Open My Eyes" . I hope you find this review helpful. But remember, this is your poem.

Title:

When I Open My Eyes - It symbolizes birth of a child when he open his eyes and enters the world. It's great how you want to see the world, so beautiful.

Flow and Rhythm:


This is a monorhyme poem. I find it good but the flow isn't smooth. The sentences should be of approx same length to maintain a rhythm or pattern. You can read your poem aloud to get my point.

Review:

The poem is emotional and sensitive. It describes the beauty of nature and appreciates what the world has for us.

Your writing is good. Your thought of teaching the children great moral values is superb. Here are some of my suggestions. I believe that they will help you in your upcoming writing journey.

1. Fill all the three genres. It is easy to find someone's work with all the genres filled and it describes your poetry too.

2. Leaving space is okay but you can increase the font as many people may have eyesight issue, so they can easily read it.

3. Read aloud your poem to see if the flow is easy and smooth to be followed.

4.Try to keep the length of lines approx equal.

5.Add word count and line count at the bottom.

6. My last suggestion is- If you want to enhance you presentation, you can use colours, different fonts, bold, underline, etc.

Overall Comment:

This is a good piece of poetry. It seems like you enjoyed writing this. Thank you for sharing. I hope to read more from you.

Keep Writing!
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