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Review #4670901
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 Wrong Address  [E]
When one gets it all wrong
by AmyJo- only 2 steps behind -
Review of Wrong Address  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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*Delight* Hey AmyJo! I am happy to review your story in the "I Write: Enter the Second Decade" ! *Smile*


*Magnify* The title gave me a clue to the theme and I was imagining all the things that could go with having the wrong address. It appealed to my curiosity.

*Magnify*I enjoy Sherlock Holmes tales so this has an appealing theme and your use of the number 22 from the prompt is perfect. The two addresses do have similarities so it makes sense the man would get mixed up maybe. *Thumbsup* Even the rhyming names add to the humour of the tale.

*Magnify* The first line set the place and drew me in as we do not know who would be at the door.
The description of the man was clear both physical and in his action. I thought Mr. Jones was helpful inspite of him thinking the man rude. He did see he might need help. I thought of Peter Pan when you said lost something Precious and Jones thought the man lost. *Wink* I think you could put Mr. Jone's thoughts to himself in italics as it is not spoken aloud. *Smile*

*Magnify* Interesting word "askance". I am not sure I have seen it too often! Cool.

*Magnify* You did a good job with making a complete episode in so few words! Wow. I think you could do another little chapter so we can see what will happen next. *Smile*

*Star*Thanks for sharing your style and joining in the party! *Balloonp*
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