Wow, that's powerful. Without too much angst, you provide a clear picture of a character, a life, and a conflict. It's a situation that crops up a lot these days, and I like the way you kept everyone almost archetypal - "The Daughter", "The Boyfriend", "The Ex" - personifying them in this way makes them representative of anyone in the situation, and the father... well, he almost broke my heart at the end.
Despite my usual feelings of hatred for loose poetic forms, I enjoyed your poem. It created a clear and nice picture of the relationship. One line puzzles me: "Offered no elicit futility on the subject" - I just can't figure out what you meant by this, and I worry that it inhibits my understanding of your poem.
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