Fantastic poem!!
Inspired by you even I have begun writing poetry (in order to be sponsored one needs to write poetry). You can read my Dragon Slayer, although not even a fraction of your poem's greatness equals it yet you can give it a try.....
Thanks for the wonderful read,
Magician
Nice educational piece...I was hoping for a twist (as your name and contests suggest) but sometimes the best twist one can give is by giving no twists at all........
Right now you must be quite busy with reading and reviewing but do acknowledge this
Great story!
I was thinking of participating in the contest too but seeing that such great entries have already reached there, I doubt if I stand y chance. I too was going to use the same theme as you.
Wow a great scary poem...........
It came to a shock and surprise to me that we were dealing with a she-vampire and the prey was a man. What I feel is that vampires are more of pitied than hated. Hating evil curses is not good nor is it of any use. Perhaps you can include how even the vampiress was unable to stop herself. Try displaying vampires and other creatures as pitiful and scary. Also I believe the content rating should be 18+. I know that it is not good but even my vampire-werewolf story was asked to be rated as 18+ even though I am just 14!!
Great story!! So far....
I request you too please please increase its size since cats can play other sports as well. I wish I could read about a team game of cats, it sounds nice.....
I found no errors but the repeated use of the word "feline" can be substituted for a better story. I believe that you can expand this story. I think that this line can be corrected as:
"but I swear as he passed the whimpering soaked Chardonnay,..." TO
"But I can swear that as he passed the whimpering and soaked Chardonnay,...."
I may be wrong (since I am only 14). You can also keep track of the Bejieng Olympics and apply any stories and controversies to your feline friends.
Brilliant story.....
For a moment I thought that the dead body was one of those classic "Living dead" as in other stories but this is one great original piece. I think you could do with some more discription of the un-invited guest. The finishing line can be given more effect by saying:
"But who knows who will be the un-invited guest's next 'host'.
Enjoy!!
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