#1. You write great descriptive sentences. I loved
all these:
1. An alabaster stone, wrapped in a richly-dyed violet cloth, rested gently between her palms.
2. Fragile, thin fingers gently rubbed over the silken sphere as it pulsed with energy— struggling to escape and reunite with its true bearer.
3. The warmth of the orb traveled into her age-worn hands and through her pale blue veins with every ripple of power.
4. Two deeply wrinkled, closed eyes twitched under concentration as the woman tried to contain the raw strength of the stone.
5. Another wave of energy assaulted her frail body; she gently trembled.
6. A low groan escaped her throat as she briefly paused along the tree encompassed path.
#2. I especially liked this description. You expressed the aging but still respected the individual.
She placed her shriveled hands on the arms of the leather-backed chair and tried to stand. She stumbled slightly, age weakening her strength.
#3. I especially liked this remark too.
"A lot was changed that night." She lowered her gaze in a sign of respect and remembrance.
#4. Another very descriptive sentence:
"Using magik or medicine. Or, I don't know. Just something." Her gaze fell as her words trailed off. A dull ache ate at her, gnawing at her eyes, forcing tears to conjure
#5. You do have a way with words:
He hoped his words would sooth the worry contorting her sun-kissed perfection.
#6. You successfully gave this character great depth.
He quietly thought to himself, And one-day you'll learn how true that is. You're not nearly as alone in the world as you've been led to believe.
#7. A lovely piece. I hope to read more of your writing.
#1. My sympathies here. I realise your job must be very hard and the best rewards may be your personal satisfaction at what you do. My best wishes. Keep yourself happy by doing what you want to do...the most.
All those great holidays that we get? We need that time to grade the papers that stack up becasue there aren't enough hours in the regular workday available.
I'm not exactly a new member but in reality I am. I joined awhile ago but I never really did anything with the account.
I can't afford to upgrade now either but since I've started writing again, I'm going to try and work with a free account, until something happens with my writing.
At any rate I'm glad to be here, once again. I think that I have the disclipline to continue now.
I loved reading your work. I hope to see some more. I love to write, just as you. I'm sure you're very familiar with inspiration and how it can help you to contineously improve. I know from experience, that you most definitely need this inspiration every single day. I sincerely wish you the best of luck in any future writing.
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