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Review of Do no harm  
Review by Applebrush
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Overall, I like it. The poem reads like a cohesive story. I would have rated it higher, but for a possible error and the fact that I just don't read much romance.

I feel that one who prefers works centering on romance and romantic relationships would make a better critic.

As for the one error, I might be wrong. Did you mean own or out? Own don't sound right in this line.'Her moans of pleasure drown own his sighs'

I hope this helps. Good poem overall. Great job!
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