I think this poem can be really uplifting for someone who suffers from depression. It shows that one is not alone and that they are always stronger than they think.
My favourite line is: "To the ones with stains,Stains on their souls" because it shows that pain can sometimes be hidden, and while we may appear to be fine on the outside, that doesn't mean we are.
#deep #ohsodeep #iwouldcry #ifiwasn'tsocoldhearted perfect as always. you are a profound little bastard with so much to say, YOU never cease to amaze me. Have you shown this to your brother? I bet you didn't. You shouldn't, he would probably make fun of you. Show him sometime later, in his deathbed or something. He'll cry then.
I think this is good, just pay attention to punctuation and grammar. For example, in the last verse "Your the love of my life" you may have mean "You're the love of my life"
That was a good piece of work. It's touching and inspirational. I don't know if the girl is you, if it's someone you know/knew or if you made it all up, but it made me feel something.
I love Autumn, and this nice piece of poetry made me look foward to it even more! I like the last part especially because it rhimes.
I don't read a lot of poems, but I have a notebook where I write the ones that I like (I usually find them on tumblr, a blogging website) and I'm writing this one in there. Good job.
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