Once upon a time there was a woman who had lost everything - her job, her love, her self-esteem, her confidence, and her self-respect. Everyday, she wondered where she went wrong in life. She used to cry at nights and ask God, "How many more tests do I have to give?". Seven years passed and she only found herself falling further into the depths of darkness.
One day, she could not take it any longer! How bad is it going to get than this?! That's it! Things can only move up from here on! Because of that one thought, she embarked on a painful journey of change, until finally, she managed to turn things around for herself.
She secured a job which brought her face to face with her fears. This boosted her confidence and self-esteem. She started recognizing her core values and promised herself that she will not compromise on her self-respect. She stopped chasing love and started focusing on herself. Suddenly, her life became very busy. Work occupied most of her time.
Little did she know that true love was waiting to enter her life...
This truly made my day! You won't believe but I have not been in a very good mood today. After reading this, there was a big smile on my face which is still there as I write now.
Every time I lose faith in humanity, someone comes and restores it. Thank you for that! It is really very sweet of you to take out the time and thank everyone.
Thank you for giving a beautiful end to my day. God bless you!
The short description of the story aroused my curiosity. The flow was very smooth and retained my interest till the end. I wanted to know what happens next. I liked the descriptions the best. I found them to be very vivid and was able to visualize. I did not find any grammatical mistakes or spelling errors. Overall, a nice read!
I was expecting something else (on negative lines), instead it turned out to be an amusing read. I feel sorry that you had to go through such an experience. I really liked the way you have described the emotions. It made me want to read further as to what happens next and find out more about that strange woman.
I was not able to spot any grammatical errors; however I did not understand the word "exascerbated". I even looked it up on Google as well as on Oxford dictionaries website. May be, you want to re-look into the spelling.
This is just my personal opinion regarding the period "." at the end of the title. I feel it looks a bit odd.
I hope things were fine between you and your wife after this incident!
I was intrigued by the title of your story. The fact that it has received an Award only increased my interest.
I really liked the flow of the story. It kept my engrossed till the end. The description is so vivid that I was able to visualize the scene. I was also able to feel the narrator's suffering. I did not spot any grammatical errors or spelling mistakes.
I liked this sentence the best - "I can't hear the music of the wind whispering through the red sands."
I got drawn to your story because of the title and the short description.
The flow is smooth, it kept me engrossed till the end. I was really curious to find what went wrong. Richard's personality is well defined. It gives me an idea why the narrator is in love with him. She has explained her frustrations when things turned bad. I would like to know how the relationship was between the couple during the good times as well. I feel then I would be able to relate to the narrator's loss better. With regards to grammar and spellings, I was not able to spot any errors.
I was drawn to this story because of the title and the short description. It got me curious as to what the story is all about.
The flow is very good and kept me engrossed till the end. The dialogues felt like real people were talking. The description was such that I was able to visualize what was happening during the story. I really liked the way it has been presented. I did not spot any grammatical / spelling errors as such. Without spoiling the suspense, I would say I liked the ending. Good work!
The title and the short description drew me to your story. It kept me interested till the end. The flow was good. It felt nice to read about an unconventional princess!
I am not sure if this is how you wanted the story to look like, but how about adding "!" after say for eg., "Ugh", "Sigh", "Wait", "Oh my god". I feel it provides more impact to the story, especially at the end. Again its all upto you.
I didn't find any spelling or grammatical errors as such. Overall, it was a nice, light read.
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You won't believe but I have not been in a very good mood today. After reading this, there was a big smile on my face which is still there as I write now.
