i felt light while reading this, you know that calm soft feeling in your head. and by saying that, i mean that this a really really good. :) that lovely lovely love. good writing in here mate, i hope to read more good things from you. :) hahaha. may you be blesses with more ink.
hey. uhm this is good. though i noticed in the third stanza, i know punctuations is something hard in poetry but i think you should at least put a comma after the word gave. but the thought of the poem is good. :) anyways, the comma thing is just my suggestion. keep writing. :)
wow... this is so beautiful. i could feel it. the first stanza really made an impact and have me reading through. i also believe in that thing. everyone rally made their print on you, whether it's someone you haven't even talked with. :) keep up wrting good stuffs.
Why fear, you're right. But I hold into the belief that those who fear are smart people because they knew what's in front of them, and those who are able to conquer those fear are the brave ones. :) goo writing though. keep up with your writing. :)))
your poems suggest long-distance relationship. is my understanding right? the poem 'star' also had this idea. i might conclude that you are in one. :) but, taking into account the poem, it's good. i like the lines, wind blowing softly upon the night skies. it suggests a calm and sweet feeling to me. :)
my first reaction when i read the 1st stanza was, 'seriously'... but, seriously, how come you came up with the idea of same-same letters. i don't know if this is a kind of poem, but this is cute. (i am thinking of writing something like this, do you mind?) but maybe it would be more beautiful if the first letters formed a word or a phrase, it will add to the cuteness. (cuteness, what a lame word.) but, this is good. keep up writing!
the idea was common, looking up at the same heaven, but this is quite adorably put. i love the first six lines and how it diverted into the idea of missing someone that you hope is also looking at the same sky you're looking at... good job in here. continue writing. :)
i like how you used the words thy and others that i usually read from shakespeare (the author i gave is so cliche. haha) but this is goor, with all that words and the feeling it suggests. the wondering of the speaker and the curiosity she felt. this is a good job, (too). :)
i can feel the sadness of separation in here and their love for each other and the pain their dealing with. but i can fell the must of separation. this poem is good, it makes me feel real things in a relationship. :) you did a good job in here too. and so i'm reading other works from you. :)
this is funny and truthful. i particularly support #1. haha. mountain of debts, that would put the child in a poor and sad life i guess. but, reading the rest, i am now wondering if i should have a child myself when i finally got married. I CAN'T SING! I WANT TO TRAVEL! I LIKE TO SLEEP! and I EAT DINNER (and every meal) in front of the TV. gosh, do you think i should have a child. but, all in all, great thoughts. :)
why? why? why? questions with multiple answers. it was good that you're able to write something about it. this reminded me of milan kundera's unbearable lightness of being, which is my favorite, though there's little differences in the flow of story. feminist! :) haha. great job.
i usually don't read long poems because i find it tiring but i read yours. hats-off to the brave character! though it suggests a sin to end a sin, so what the character is brave. :) though maybe you could try combining some lines to avoid readers hanging and maybe to make it shorter. but that's just a lame suggestion. :)
i wanna cry because of this. i just thought that, maybe my mom also felt this way when i was born. :) it's so light yet the feel of love is there. may you be one of the best mothers out there. :)
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