This item, #2317269, titled: Terror Theater by author Ifunanya is a good story idea. The characters could have been expanded more and their individual outcomes explained in more details. You said in one paragraph that the theater had been abandoned for years and that the lights flickered. Which lights? The kid's flashlights or the theater's lights. If you meant the theater, Why would an abandoned place still have power?
More information about the ghost of the actress would have been nice. Name, age when she died. Her background, etc.
The kids in the group should have had names and whether they were boys or girls. I am still giving this piece of work three stars. Maybe make this item longer. I would love to see that. Keep On Writing!
The Chinese Box by Author W.D. Wolcox is a very surprising and enjoyable piece of Fiction to read. Item # 648327 is well written. The characters of the Dragon and the Keeper Of The Heart are so life-like and believable. The storyline pulls you in from the first paragraph until the last. I recommend this fine piece of work and this talented author to anyone. I am awarding this story Five Stars. Would award more if there were more available. Keep On Writing My Friend!
This item # 2315777 titled: Spooky Mission by the Author Ben, is a good story with well-defined characters. My only concern is that it could have been longer for my liking and turned into part of the first chapter of a Novella. Overall I enjoyed it and hope to see more from this talented Author in the future. I am awarding this piece of work Four and a half Stars. Keep On Writing!
This item # 2316045 By Author Christopher Day is an interesting emotionally filled poem. You can tell the author put raw, personal emotion into this finely written from the heart poem. I will admit I am not usually a fan of poetry, But this I did like. I would reccogmend this Author and their work to anyone. I am awarding this item Four and a half Stars.
This Item: Hubris by the Author- Beholden, # 2291503 surprised me. The more I read the more I loved it. Reminded me of the Old Serials from the 1930s up to the 1960s. The characters are well-defined and believable. I would have loved to see this drawn out to at least a novella-length piece of fine writing. I am awarding this Five Stars for a job well done. Keep On Writing.
Interesting story by Winchester Jones titled: The Man In 1204. Item # 2314542. The main character is a nosey little boy who is full of wonder and listens to a lot of different stories, but wants to find out the truth himself. Very believable. Reminds me of my grandsons. The writer makes you want to read to the end to see IF the boy finds out the truth or not. I am awarding this item Five stars. Keep On Writing.
This item: Soul Games by the Author Troyizen, # 2313187 is well written. The main character is well-defined and believable. I was immediately drawn into this world and could not stop reading until the end. And then I wanted he story. Be interesting to see what comes after this. I am awarding this item Five stars for a well-deserved job well done. Keep On Writing!
This item #2313960 entitled: Question Period, By Author dragonwoman, is an interesting beginning to what I hope is a much longer story in the future. The Press Secretary is very believable. I can picture the person standing in front of reporters on national tv. The Alien reporter would be interesting to see in person.You can tell by it's question it is intelligent. I award this nice piece of work Five Stars for a job well done. Keep On Writing!
Invisible Threads: Chapter One, item number #2920 By Author Loyd Gardner is the beginning of an interesting story. With well-defined storyline and Characters, You want to read until the end, then you want more. I will read more in the future. I am awarding this story Five Stars. Keep On Writing!
This item # 2311125 Titled: Nightwatch by Author Beholden is an interesting well-written story about World War 2. The main character is a guy on guard duty and it is believable. It reminded me of many nights I spent on guard duty in the Marines. I award this fine piece of writing Five Stars. I look forward to more in the future from this Author. Keep On Writing.
This item # 1870396 By Bamed is an interesting piece of work. The perspective of the main character is appealing and believable The storyline caught my attention from the get-go go and I would recommend this Author and this story to anyone. I am awarding this item Five stars for a job well done. Looking forward to more in the future. Keep On Writing!
This item # 2313540 entitled, Atomic Apocalypse Dragon by Massive Friendly Derg, although short is a well-written piece of work. I do hope this idea gets expanded upon and look forward to reading more of this story in the future. I award this item four stars. Keep On Writing!
This item-Chapter One titled Private Eye By Andrew Lee Austin, #2311237 reminds me of the stories and movies of the Nineteen Thirties and Forties. Tough-nosed well written characters. The setting is well described and you can picture yourself right there within the same rooms. I would recommend this first Chapter to anyone who loves these types of stories. I look forward to more from this Author. I give this Five stars and a job well done.
This item #2309407, They Have To Find A Dragon's Egg by Richard Allen is well written and I liked it very much. Can not wait to read the rest of this story. The characters are believable and well-defined. The story nabs you and does not let go. A great job. I give this five stars. Keep On Writing!
This item: # 1953917 entitled: I Have A Confession by Joto-Kai is a well-written and interesting story. I enjoyed reading it and recommend it to anyone. The characters and storyline are well thought out. Looking forward to seeing what this writer comes up with in the future. I award this piece five stars for a job well done. Keep On Writing!
Item number # 2263987 called Toadette's Story, written by VanillaSoftArt surprised me and that takes some doing. Totally not what I was expecting. The characters are well-written and diverse. The story is well thought out.I would recommend this writer to anyone. Hope to read more in the future and see what comes along. I am awarding five stars for a job well done. Keep On Writing.
Item #696461 Death Chamber by W.D. is a well-written story that will keep you reeled in all the way until the end, which you are not expecting. The two main characters, Simon Franks and Lieutenant Jerome Hawkins are very believable. I would recommend this to anyone who likes suspense and horror. I am awarding this five stars. Looking forward to reading more from this Author. Keep On Writing!
This item # 2184015, Titled: Daring Greatly is a well-written, sad story. The characters are believable. I can see them actually existing back in the 1800"s. I would love to see this piece expanded into a much longer story. I gladly award this story five stars for a job well done. Looking forward to reading more from you. Keep On Writing.
Your item here number 1354121 titled: One Busy Night in Chicago is well written. It grabs you from the start and does not let up. The characters are outstanding. Lou Ryan reminds me of the character Philip Marlow from all those 1940's era books and movies. Love them. I am awarding this wonderful piece of writing FIVE STARS for a job well done. Looking forward to reading more about this character. Keep On Writing!
Item number 2285936 entitled: Gnomeville by Penelope Moonbeam is an interesting Fantasy tale. This should be expanded into a young people's story. I think it would go over well. I hope to see more from this talented Author. I am awarding this work five stars for a job well done. Keep On Writing!
Song Of the Vamp, item # 2246363 written by Words Whirling Around. ow, what can I say about this piece of work? The author has crafted a wonderful well written and witty story. The two main characters remind me of an old married couple. They are believable in the way they interact with each other. The end is a twist you really do not see coming. I give this story five stars for a job well done. I hope to see more added to this story in the future. Keep on Writing!
Item number #2270065 titled Queens On The Range by Words Whirling Around id a pretty good Western story. The characters are strong and believable. They reminded me of actual people I have met. I have given this four stars out of five. My only concern with it is to me the chapters were too short and should have described the characters in more detail during each. I did like it and would recommend it for reading. I would like to see more to this story. Good Job. Keep On Writing.
Item:#2258829 named: The Walking Dead(Coronavirus) By Drummergirl shows plenty of promise. While the characters are teenagers, they could have been made to be more real. The story leaves the reader to draw their own conclusions as to is this could really happen. Like I said earlier, this shows promise and I hope the author continues with this piece of work in progress. I give the story three stars. Keep On Writing.
Item number 2204193 by Victor L. Rolling Jr. Is a well written Vampire story. The moment you start reading you know you are in for something Magical. Believable characters drag you along until the end, which is not a fairy tale ending. I would love to see more of this story line. I give this piece Five Stars. Keep on writing!
Jack McCrary, item #2197959, written by Words Whirling 'Round tells the story of Jack and Bessie and their love. I found it to be well written and the storyline, though in Poem form, flows ahead and I could not stop reading until I had finished. I would recommend this to anyone who is a lover of the Western Genre. I give this Poem five stars for a job well done. Keep on Writing.
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