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Fair. Constructive advice and I love showing others what they are doing right since way too often people get caught up in what's wrong with a piece.
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all different forms of art. procrastinating. visualization and ideas. deep thinking.
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Review by chaosinarcadia
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
I think this is actually your strongest chapter yet! You had a very great inclusion of background story, flashback, character development, description, and dialogue. I think the balance of elements that you utilized in this chapter was perfect and I hope you continue the utilization of these other elements because you execute them very skillfully and gracefully. I cannot wait to read what is to come!
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Review by chaosinarcadia
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Wow, I didn't expect this to happen! Great solid chapter! Loved the balance between description and action. You did great with building up a scene poetically and delivering the action dramatically. This chapter gave me lots of anticipation for what's to come! I am sorry for this late review but please send the next chapter, I would love to read it!
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Review by chaosinarcadia
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Wow! I really enjoyed reading this first chapter. I really enjoyed how descriptive you are and most of your descriptions are extremely successful. However, I noticed that at some points you got a little carried away with your use of descriptions of the surroundings. When that happened, the story got sort of forgotten at that moment. As much as I love your descriptive language, you may want to be careful with how much you are inserting in relation with the amount of action language or plot. Though, I do really admire your descriptive language and think that you have a really special way of using descriptive language and observation. Other than that, I really enjoyed this read and I am very excited to see what comes next in this story!!!
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Review by chaosinarcadia
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
I really loved this story!I love Greek mythology so this really made me happy. Anyway, next a few tips. First of all, there are some grammatical errors, nothing big but just some things that you may want to reread and change. Second of all, there are some parts of the story that are a bit rushed in language which made some parts of the story seem a bit abrupt. Aside from that, I really enjoyed reading this story and hope to read more of your work in the future.
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Review of The Book  
Review by chaosinarcadia
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Hello,

First of all, I really enjoyed the story. It was very elegantly and thoughtfully written. Also, you are very skilled at dialogue placement and transition! You should definitely continue addressing dialogue how you did in this piece. The only area that I thought may need some improvement was the beginning. In my opinion, it seemed like it was a part of a separate piece of writing that comes prior to this piece. All I would really recommend you changing would be just making that introduction a little less vague.
Overall, beautiful piece!


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Review by chaosinarcadia
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Hello,
I really enjoyed your piece and for me personally, I could relate to many different things mentioned in the poem. Your words and sentences flowed perfectly and overall, the entire piece is very beautiful. However, the only thing that I wasn't real fond of was the last two lines. They seem a little bit out of place or last minute. Personally, I would just go back and maybe add a couple lines to that part or word it differently so that it is a smooth transition from why to sometimes. Aside from that, beautiful work!
-Maya


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