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Review by charlie55
Rated: 18+ | N/A (Review only item.)
This writing is a lot better than mine when it comes to expressing feelings. I'd like to hear how the second chapter sounds to my mind.
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Review of The Terrorist  
Review by charlie55
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
We would and should hope as we going farther into the future, the world would realize the futility of violence. But as the population of the world keeps growing we will only hear of more violent acts unless the worlds young can be lead to a new way of thinking! And towards that end I thank you for this piece.
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Review by charlie55
Rated: E | (5.0)
I like your review of a review! I write for my own self improvement and for most of us that might be enough. However a bad review still hurts, so my only advice is roll with the flow and keep doing what you like to do. I enjoyed what you've written! (And everyone does like to know if our work has been noticed)
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Review by charlie55
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)

Things out of control, leading to tension and suspense, with a twist that wasn't expected. Excellent writing, with all the p's and q's and i's dotted. Now for more expounding with the minor characters for a longer piece. Sorry, that's my failing. charlie55
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Review by charlie55
Rated: E | (5.0)

I've read parts 1 and 2 of Resurrected Love, and if you have written parts 3,4,5 and 6 you've got a love story I would love to
read. Two lonely people walking through life finding themselves, in ten years, with two little girls siting on his lap, and him, rocking them to sleep. And her, holding there little son. Picture perfect ending! -charlie55
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Review by charlie55
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)

Excellent writing! You ripped my heart out! And if that isn't good writing, I don't know what is! Very well thought out on bringing the story to fruition, with the little girl telling the story, and making the reader apathetic to their plight. I'll have to read more of your stories.- charlie55
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Review by charlie55
Rated: E | (4.0)


I was going great guns a year ago with a story until I remembered I had read the story as a child. Since then I've kept my
writing to, what I would have like to have been, or what I would like to do. All in all, it still takes a lot of work to write something
that I would say is original. As for reading while I have a story in my head that I'm thinking about, I can kiss that story good by. Back to originality! I think if you find a story that sparks your interest, you should take it and improve on it. If anything I've
written falls into this category, take it and run with it!
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Review by charlie55
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)

A well written and interesting piece of fiction about the afterlife. It kept my interest, although I would have liked to have seen the piece extended somewhat. A afterlife code of ethics maybe? How you qualified for the jobs. Did it have anything to do
with your life on Earth? Don't get me wrong, I enjoyed the story!
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Review of Uranium Eyes  
Review by charlie55
Rated: E | (5.0)


Very well done. Are dreams a reality? Or is reality nothing more them dreams? You took a thought, and made it almost believable. A trait of a good writer. So I ask you, let your mind wander, do some scribbling, and make my day! From an avid reader, keep writing.-charlie55
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Review of A Good Writer  
Review by charlie55
Rated: E | (4.0)

Making a person think outside the box. Good or bad. O yes, and humors good too. Throw in something philosophical.

That's good too. Maybe in the first chapter, toss the hero down the mountain and for the rest of the book have him fight to

get back up. Oh yes. That was Louis L'Amour. My advice, write for your self. If you want imperfect, read my stuff. And, I

think what you have here is good writing. Just don't quit!
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Review of Mirror, mirror  
Review by charlie55
Rated: E | (5.0)

Excellent writing. A very good beginning to a story that I would love to read. Nothing more intriguing then a mystery waiting to be solved. Keep writing, I'd love to read more. Reading someone's work is a refection of how their mind works.-charlie55
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Review by charlie55
Rated: E | (4.5)

Excellent writing, and I completely got were you're coming from. Phonestating - Trying to be understood on the phone, while becoming completely frustrated. Used situational comedy in a setting where everyone's been is very funny. Keep writing, your good.-charlie55
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Review of The Box  
Review by charlie55
Rated: E | (4.5)

If this piece is a fair example of how you write, you are a much better writer then I will ever be. Having loved and lost is
better then to have never loved at all, and this piece pays homage to this cliché very well. The only thing I find dis believable
is parents letting their child grieve for three years without some intervention beside taking care of their grandson. This is just a fathers opinion. Write some more. I would love to read them.-charlie55
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Review of Never Tell a Lie  
Review by charlie55
Rated: E | (5.0)

Through the eyes of a child. Situational humor at it's best. Problems in the classroom. People like to experience what other people do. Stories are a very good medium, and you did a vary good job with this story. Well written and thought out, with a delivery that was great. Loved it.-charlie55
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Review by charlie55
Rated: E | (5.0)


I consider this piece, not so much to be reviewed, as to be read. However it does stand up to the test of review because
it is masterfully done. The emotion that this work has, the writing does it justice. Thank you for putting it where I could read
it. charlie55
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Review by charlie55
Rated: E | (5.0)


I've heard of accidently replacing salt for the sugar as a long standing joke, and my wife is always improvising, so I totally
bought into the story. Writing was excellent, humor was good, along with being very believable for me. Thank you for sharing.-charlie55
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Review of Jack B. Rob  
Review by charlie55
Rated: E | (4.0)

Before I begin, let me say. I read all three items and I found you have a very good grasp of the English language, and a very good imagination. You've tried to let your imagination run wild' which is good, but I like to read believable, hidden agenda,[which you have somewhat] and leave me with something to think about. Keep writing. I think you've got more talent then I have.charlie55
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Review of Thank you  
Review by charlie55
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)


Wow, you writing is so much, much better then any thing I've done. My niece says I have no FLUFF in my writing, and I have to agree. But you have turned the words into descriptions of feelings and insights. The writing came off as how you felt.
If this is true, don't be so hard on yourself.- charlie55
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Review by charlie55
Rated: E | (4.0)

Well written. It draws a person into the setting and makes it believable. I can just picture the scene with two twelve year

old girls getting better acquainted. Keep writing while your horizon grow and the sky could be the limit.- charlie55 good luck.
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Review of Food for words  
Review by charlie55
Rated: E | (4.5)
Food for thought. A little of this, and a little of that. You end up with something delicious, but what it is we won't tell.

If it doesn't taste good it must be the cook. The Book is nonrefundable. Subtle humor, I like it. If something else hits your

funny bone write it down and share it. Please. charlie55







































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Review by charlie55
Rated: E | (4.5)

How dose a story speak to a person? - Oh no, they did it to me again. Poor defenseless me. I can't wash it of off me. I

can't shoot them. I'm just a bench. In my last life I was a hit man. Now I'm in hell. Inept, immobile, and vulnerable.

Sorry about the rant, but you inspired me. And that's what a story should do. Well written and thought out. charlie55
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Review by charlie55
Rated: E | (4.5)


As an opening to a story, it caught my attention and I wanted to read more. Please, use your imagination and write a novel.

You decide if it will be fantasy, fiction, or your truth of how it might be. I'd be interested in reading it.- Well written.-charlie55
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Review by charlie55
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)


Well written, with pain, hope, drama, and believability, all wrapped into one short story. The 40's code of ethics, walking the line, worrying what the neighbors thought. All were pressures to put family second and acceptance first. Please write and type more stories. I would like to read them. charlie55
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Review of Passion  
Review by charlie55
Rated: E | (4.0)


Wow. With all that emotion, you should add BRAVE. Brave to express your inmost thoughts, and then do it vary well. You also seem to have a handle on human analytics. Well written and thought out. The only criticism I would venture to say; would be, put a space between lines so my old eyes can read it better.-charlie55
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Review of The New Moon  
Review by charlie55
Rated: E | (4.0)


Well written, with a clear understanding of society, and how we need to survive in the now, and the hereafter. I like the transition from focusing on success, to becoming aware of the world around him, to what he needs outside this world. It got a little heavy for lite reading, but what would you take out? Good job.-charlie55
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