Chereda's (chereda) Reviews

Thanks for this story, God knows I really needed it, that's why I came looking to this site. I usually read to shut down the tape monster in my head.

I like how you write, the word combinations you choose to drive your point home. The first two paragraphs are simply wonderful.

Write more, the act itself is already a blessing but to find a piece that echoes your own thoughts is a blessing tenfold.

Natasha.

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#3851273

Review of A Girl and Her Car

Review by Chereda

Rated: 13+

| (4.5)

Hello Elisa,

Even though I prefer poems that rhyme I really liked your poem for the emotion you display and feel towards an inanimate object. In a world where people are disposable, much less cars, the affection you show for your beloved friend is heartwarming.

My grandma is that way, liking possessions and animals better than she does people. But she showed me how to love the world around me and cherish what I have instead of yearning for what I do not. Your poem reminded me of that lesson. Thank you.

I hope you have a new traveling companion now. :)

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#3847069

Review of 108 So. Pearl St.

Review by Chereda

Rated: 18+

| (3.0)

Hi, I found this story on writer's cramp and got confused. How does it relate to the prompt and what is the point and why are you butchering the language with purposeful mistakes?

Natasha

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#3846579

Review of Ladies, Please Take Your Seat

Review by Chereda

Rated: E

| (4.5)

A very thoughtful and well written essay. I thought on this topic too but in terms of respect. The Ladies got the special treatment back in the day because the Gentlemen were raised that way. The Ladies commanded their respect not because they were weak, but because the norms of behavior did not allow a man to beat up a woman if she left her home unescorted as were Afghan women beaten by the Taliban soldiers when encountered alone on the street, so no, your analogy does not ring true.

I also like the fact that you accepted the norm of behavior established in the men's apartment and internalized that lesson to help you raise Gentlemen and Ladies of your own. I only hope to be so receptive and respectful to other people's needs.

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#3843166

Review of the cat, the doorbell and the shoes

Review by Chereda

Rated: E

| (3.5)

Imaginative story with some spelling errors like "sticking features" I suppose you meant striking. Needs a proof read.
Also you have to bold the promt words in the body of the story otherwise your work will be disqualified from the contest.