Wow! Your story captured my attention from beginning to end. And it was not an ending I expected so I had to re-read the last two paragraphs. I love it when stories surprise me. Your story is intelligently written and your word usage is very impressive. You made me sympathetic to the character of Cassie and made me hate the character of Meredith. So much so that I was still left with more sympathy for Cassie than Meredith even at the end of the story. Well done! You are a very talented writer.
I found your piece by using the "Random Review" feature. I thoroughly enjoyed your poem because it is spot on! I love how you are able to use humor to describe a very frustrating situation. I have not flown in awhile and was not aware that they are charging for cokes now. I love the line "I stare at her like she's a cheat". Your descriptions are great! Thanks so much for sharing this and keep writing!
I found your piece in the "Rate a Newbie" section. I enjoyed reading your story. It is so challenging to write a 100 word story; I have tried it. I think you did a good job. I love your descriptions. I was able to picture the trees and imagine myself there. I found it to be peaceful. I am partial to trees myself so I really liked that your story let me escape to the forest briefly. Thanks for sharing and keep writing. :)
I found your poem in the "Please Review" section. The title of your poem intrigued me so I had to read it and I am very glad I did. I find your poem to be very interesting and it has a lovely sadness to it, if that makes any sense. I like how you use what others may deem as positive descriptions of summer as your reasons that it's not your season. And I love the way you wrote "Makes it hard to
think
breath (breathe maybe?)
be"
I just love those lines. I love what those lines are saying and the way you constructed them added even more power. This poem makes me think that maybe the person in the poem had a heartache during the springs or summers of her past. Or maybe she has not even had a chance to experience that spring and summer love and was just surrounded by it as she wished for those seasons to pass as soon as possible. It's just a really good poem that captured my attention and made me think. So thank you very much for sharing and please keep writing. :)
I found your piece in the "Review a Newbie" section. I loved your poem from beginning to end. Your words painted a vivid picture and I was able to envision the young boy wanting to fly out of that swing. I loved the style and flow of your poem. Your poem contained a certain amount of simple innocence along with a complexity. I enjoyed reading it very much. Thank you for sharing your talent with us and keep writing!
I was totally expecting a gruesome bear attack to happen in this story so I really liked how you set that expectation up and then went a whole other route. I also enjoyed how a group of bunnies was the source of terror in the early morning. Often I feel like I want to get as far away from civilization as possible so I liked the way your story points out that there is a certain amount of "safeness" and peace of mind that comes with being surrounded by others, even if they are strangers. I only saw a couple of typos, but they did not take away from your story. Thanks for sharing. :)
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