very nice poem,but again a sad one, for you have lost a love, and that is always sad. when i seen the title
"behind brown eyes", my heart leapt, for i lost a grandson 3 years ago in an auto accident, and his favorite song was "behind blue eyes"
very well written, reads very well, but i feel sad when i read it because i know it was written by someone that has been hurt by their true love, and they are sad, --- so i am sad,,, but a nice poem
I like the story and the concept was very good.We as parents should always strive to set good examples for our children and teach them the values of kindness and christianity.
now some critique: I dont think you proof read your works before you put it up. there are a lot of spelling errors and grammatical errors. we all make these error when we write.
thats why its so immperative that we check what we do./
mac
my,,, what a beautifuk poem.for the love of our children, we would do mosyt anything, how very wonderful the words
" They would all go to jesus and be held in his arms"
may the lord bless you in your writing
I like the way you write.
Also I feel the same as you--- I dont follow the rules very well--- mostly because i dont know them-- but I like to write as I feel it
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