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Review by Cookiedoctor
Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
The story is well told and keeps a momentum throughout. I liked the care the speaker takes in making sure the little ones are OK and somehow saying Grandma should live on. I think the crux of the story is more about the secret than the death or the drama and would enjoy more honesty in how that's revealed.

Without being mean, I think if your story is about incest and your grandfather's curse it would help to be more honest with the reader about the total emotional story. This reads like a report. I think you have so much more to say.
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Review by Cookiedoctor
Rated: ASR | (3.5)
I appreciate this story and how you have reflectively told of her experience in the museum and of course her experience of the holocaust. We live in a world where few people take the time to listen, particularly to those with old stories to tell. In some ways the story is about your willingness to listen, again.

Oddly I reviewed another work today that I felt the same way about and it is that I would encourage you to tell your experience of this event, of knowing what she lived through and how you felt. This is as much about you as it is about her. Nice work,
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