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Review of Coffee and Korea  
Review by coolpapabell
Rated: E | (4.5)
Very well done, Martin. I like the way you leap into each paragraph. I noticed that in the last piece I read of yours as well. It's an engaging slight of hand. Again, the brevity of the story left me wanting more, but that's a good thing I suppose.
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Review of Spring Cleaning  
Review by coolpapabell
Rated: E | (4.5)
Wonderful feel for the melding of cultures. Great turns of phases, "Red bean paste has its moments, too" and "They understand 'listen'. Now if they could only understand what they are listening to."

I guess it's a fantasy of mine to go somewhere foreign, completely foreign and try to make a go of things. This gives a clear sense of how that might play out. My only reservation with the piece is that I wished it were more cohesive and a little less random. The brevity of thoughts sometimes made me long for more.

Great stuff.

-EA
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Review by coolpapabell
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Very smart, sharp stuff. I liked the opening story regaled by Chef/Princess Di very much. It draws you in quickly and catches your attention. As a reader, it would be easier if you stuck with referring to the chef as "Chef" instead of Princess Di & Clyde. It's clear (through dialogue and descriptive) that they are all one in the same. I'd also tinker with the formatting. It's a little all over the place. However, I know this is an early draft and I really enjoyed it. Looking forward to more....
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