Very nicely put. I think this is something everyone should understand. We are all entirely different people, each under our own stresses and so forth. I know there are some people who shoes I could not walk in, nor fill. I can feel the passion of how your point comes across. Great job!
This is really good. I love all the wording you used. I however have a suggestion. Instead of one long poem, break it up into parts. For example, each 4 or 5 part phrases and descriptions. No double spacing. Start each part with The girl I seek. For example:
The girl I seek is one of beauty
One that I can adore
Her smile would shine the brightest
And her eyes would make my heart soar
The girl I seek is one of intelligence
Able to make decisions on her own
How she’ll amaze me with her skills
And the manners she learned from home
Just a spelling error, I really enjoyed this prose. I call it prose, because in paragraph form, to me it is prose and not poetry. But, I don't know any of the poetry rules. I would like to say, there is NOTHING Wrong with having friends WITH Benefits. LOL Nice job.
Nice work here. I want to extend best wishes for the contest, as I am entered as well. I really liked the story, it was a bit too sci-fi in a weird way for me.Maybe sci-fi isn't the word I am looking for. Too gothic maybe. Good erotic overtone. Good luck again in the contest.
Wow, this is really cool. You did this when my computer was broke down, and I am really excited to be included in this years Seasons. I am hoping that I can come up with something you can use in the raffle that is original and worth putting in it. So, I guess I had better get started. Thanks for sharing this.
Jayme, I really like this poem. You've got some talent girlie. I know you are a newbie here, but I got a few suggestions. Click the spell to correct any spelling mistakes (there are a few). You can also make a bio for your port if you'd like to. Ahh heck why not come over to my house tomorrow (Friday) and we can work on me showing you the ropes here. I am so glad you joined. You'll love it here.
I liked them all, it was difficult to decide, but finally picked one. Wow, you got quite a bit of votes here, and a variety of answers. The Hobbits were all so cool too. By the way, all the actors were fantastic doing there parts. Nice poll!
Very good question. I voted on how the author thinks it is. As someone who writes erotica herself, I can tell you this... Some of my more romantic stories are art, whereas I have some that could be considered porno. The actions taken by the reader doesn't bother me, in fact I think its cool if I turned someone on with my writing, itn't that why we write? To get a reaction from our reader.
Nice job.
This could prove to be fun. Personally, I can make you a list of songs that describe me. I don't want that to sound like I have multiple personalities, just that different songs for different moods. The song I picked for the contest is about the struggle I had at one point in my life. But I am feeling much better now! Hahahaha
You know, I love this song. I'm an eighties girl. This song was one of my favorites. To me this song means close to the same as it does for you. I too am a giver, I never think of what I will receive in return, but sometimes I hope that I won't be overlooked. I need to learn to be selfish sometimes I guess.
Good choice. Glad to met you.
Once agin a very good start. I made this mistake before so I will let you know what I have learned. I would lose the commentary at the end of each story. Reason #1, you already have all the (chapters) clearly marked. Leave you readers curious to continue reading without having to encourage them to read the next part. You story will stand on its own.
Good job, write on!
Wow! Nice job. I read your folder intro as well, and I don't know any poetry rules myself. I truely believe poetry comes from your heart. As one poet to another, you did a really good job. It was well written and well spoken. I loved the ending. Write on!
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