You've done a awsome job at establishing your charaters! I have very high hopes reading this piece!
A chapter a day with reviews to stay! Your plot is really dragging me in , and the best part is it holds me there!
This Is DEFINITELY a NEW Fav of mine!
At first I thought this might be a fanfic! I'm so lucky I read on! you have such a gripping plot I couldnt stop!
Your talent is undenyable, and your charaters are well established! I was certainly impressed with this!
this is definitely one of my faves that i will be checking on often.
Color is the perfect way to express a particular feeling, colors communicate to us in a way that words cannot.
Though youre piece is short it communicates a lot of emotion!
I took a writing class a few years ago, It didnt go well... I could only write Free Verse and my grade steadyly fell because of it,
the teacher would tell me that my poems were too raw and I didnt revise enough, now look at me!
Though I dont understand Rhyme Scheme, (Where does it say poems HAVE to rhyme) or anything else like that.
I can read a good poem like yours and feel for the charaters and feel the same emotion.
To me the best thing about this is that its entertaining IN LENGTH.
when writing a long compsition the most important part to keep the reader interested! I love to sit during lunch and read a good story or poem.
and when I pick my topic and whatnot I love coming away from it feeling like I have read somthing good. It reallt re-energizes me during a long day.
You could really use better discrptions, i would suggest putting more time into your story.
the more time you put into your story, the better it gets! plus having just a line of text and several options can make the story go by too quickly. in short, Keep Going!
You could really use better discrptions, i would suggest putting more time into your story.
the more time you put into your story, the better it gets! plus having just a line of text and several options can make the story go by too quickly. in short, Keep Going!
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