I thought this item was pretty good. It was very readable. I loved the idea of our little Cupid being a big guy, and I loved the addition of a little history; I have no idea if it's accurate, but it adds a bit of depth and interest.
It makes things more difficult when you can't include anything but dialogue; no said, groaned, explained as a segue. When disallowing the other little things like lighting a match, leaning on a wall or storming off, it forces you to put identifiers, color and descriptions in the dialogue, so the dialogue has a bigger burden. I think this dialogue carried the weight pretty well.
It had plot, theme, character development--even good grammar and spelling, while holding my interest all the way through. You threw in a little humor, which I always like. I have no negatives for you--good job.
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