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Review of Writing Lesson 2  
Review by Dave
Rated: E | (5.0)
I can feel you at night. You sit on my bed. We have Suzi and Luci time.
"Suzi,I am right here I am not dead."

You seem emotionally attached to certain aspects in your life, Maybe a close loved one the has been separated from you?

I assume that this is how you deal with what haunts you? writing short stories and sharing them with us? This is a good out let to let your true feelings out, rather than hoard them for yourself and let it build up inside.

Great ending by the way.
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Review by Dave
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
THis story is fun with a lot of unaware concepts just like you promised. I'm glad that you kept up with the pace of things as well. Unaware is my favorite and I'm glad that you created this. Maybe you can check out my story and add some chapters to it? Great story. Keep on writing!
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