I would like to appreciate your choice of words and tone of the poem.
I happened to scroll through your work while I was reminiscing about my own mother. Some say maturity cones with age. But as far as I have seen, pain seems to accompany age. They void that a mother feels is not the empty nest, but the realization that in her zeal to feed and nurtur the family, she has forgotten and neglected her 'self'. In retrospect I accuse myself for picking silly fights with her
What would I not give to be with her again. Just as her daughter. As a true friend. I wish and pray she recoups soon. Both physically and emotionally.
Reading your work bought tears to my eyes. I wish you good luck.
Hi Jacky,
I have been following you for a while now and I can claim to be a fan. All your stories are way too good and I enjoy reading them. Thanks for the laughs, Cleaning the room was hilarious.
Just read your "Easily forgotten". I really wish it wasn't a biography. I visited your portfolio and read the other entry too. I am here just to say hi, and also tell you to believe that you are perfect, just the way you are. Someone once told me that.(Alessia Cara,Scars to your beautiful,listen to this song if you haven't.) Firstly I wanted to tell you that you aren't a mistake. You deserve to be happy. Everyone does.I wish you hadn't gone through all of that. Past can't be undone. They are not in your life for a good reason. I hope you find happiness,attract positive vibes and learn to love less, unless it's the right person. Love yourself. You have a long way to go.
Kudos young writer.
Best wishes.
You will be in my thoughts and prayers. God bless.
Jasmine.
PS: As this was supposed to be a review. I have to say,I noticed 'sense,' I think you meant to write since. I attribute that to the trauma.
My wish is that kindly let the past go. Don't try to find meanings for the opinions of people who have hurt you. Move on.
Hi,
Sunshine and the strawberry stand made for a good read. It's light, easy and smooth. Just like a strawberry milkshake. It would make for a colorful book if published. I'm sure children would love to see bright pictures and read this story themselves. Sunshine is a likeable character. So aptly named.
Regards,
Jasmine.
That's so sweet. Such a cute ending. It teaches a lot about trust. It was a chance read, I'm glad I stumbled upon this awesome story of yours.
I'll be reading your other works too.
Hi Meredith,
Your poem made a good read. The pathetic condition of the young girl is captured well. Crisp description.. had an effect of a short story. Sad that he left her. But it's better than cheating on her after marriage.
Best line in the poem:
"And now her heart must grow it's own seeds"
New Plants grow from seeds is the norm. But this line highlights the fact that the seeds of courage has to be sown by ones own soul. 👍👍👍
Hi Ajeno,
I read ' The first steps'. I really appreciate the effort you have put into it. I liked how short story explains the struggle of a writer in a matter of fact manner. Keep writing knowing that we are reading. I hope your writings enlightens us. God bless.
Regards,
Jasmine.
Hi, I am so excited now. I have just posted an entry for the contest say it in 6. It's been a dream to participate in the contests run by wdc. Participating is a thrill in itself. Love being in wdc.
Regards,
Jasmine
Hi,
Camera made a good read. The coffee shop is a new setting in a genre like this one. I felt it would have been better if specific names were used.but a good attempt in second person narrative. All the best.
Regards,
Jasmine
Hi Sophie,
Though the short story is termed 'selfish' I could sense altruism in the protagonist's guilt. Quite a disturbing plot. Good effort. I read your 'Grief' too. Keep writing. All the best.
Hi Tom Buck,
'Hilarious! 👍👍👍👍 I just loved the twists. Searching for a sound in the dead of the night! Kept me guessing (and I love to guess). I love it better when the story is unpredictable.
The best part:
What I loved the best in 'the sound' is the element of suspense. The description of the confusion in the house and in the protagonist's actions. The best comedy I have read and loved the details.
Highlight:
The ending, perhaps I should say the beginning of another chapter?
Hi Naveedsk,
'Thinking is bad' made for a good read.
What I liked:
The rhyme scheme of the poem is very good. I liked it very much.
The resignation :
The moral is simple yet striking. 👍👍👍
Keep writing. All the best.
PS: I read about Hazaras and Afghanistan. I appreciate your work now. I would like to revise the rating. Sorry about my mistake.
my daughter is saying the same lines to me." Let me go mom". I have always spoken about The pain of a mother. Now After reading your poem I think I need to talk my daughter. I think i need to let go ( but only if she promises to come back) Thanks for sharing this wonderful poem. It's not only a poem but an insight into a child's mind.
With regards,
Dhivya.
'The chase'made an awesome read. I love dogs and your chase reminds me of my Brownie.
I could relate to the loss of a pet too. The title, the name of the dog and the moral... the coherence is mind blowing. You seem to have an effortless command over
the language.
What I liked best:
With such an opening line I thought something might happen to Chase also.
I read the episode about raven thrice. I was really happy that chase was safe.
And the moral which is stated in a matter of fact manner is the highlight.
Truly a splendid story.
Hi ruwth,
I just read your 'The Extroverted introvert'. I am an introvert. I don't talk to people. I prefer texting. I loved your essay. Splendid.
With regards,
Jasmine
Praise the Lord!
I am so moved by this gesture honestly. I am really glad I am a member of WDC. Christ has always made his presence in my life when I am too tired to pray. Today is one of those days . And I found your page. Just seeing the lords name has uplifted my spirits. May God bless you all.
Hi Cynaemon,
I love O'Henry. And I really loved your story. Simple, short yet mind blowing. Made for a good read.Excellent Choice of words. Am glad I read it. Waiting for more from you.
Regards,
Jasmine.
Hi,
Your essay sounds so like me. I like the tone of your essay. "Talk only when I have something to say" You nailed it. Name the essay please. The closing lines have a positive tone. Keep going.
Regards,
Jasmine.
WoW!!! What a piece of work! I have read it thrice now. I'll be re reading it for sure. I really loved the concept of redemption. Congrats! One of the bests that I hve read so far. I love the charecterisation of John. He stands tall and handsome. Lusy, Clarie are also well built charecters. Best wishes for up coming works. I'll surely search for short stories penned by you.
With regards,
JASMINE
Hi,
Kudos!!! Good job! First and the foremost credits to the title. Goes well with the theme of the story. Captures the reader right from the start. Well written piece of work. Looking forward to more works from you. Keep up the good work.
Regards,
Jasmine.
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