I know I'm not going to be able to write enough to make the limit but I'm going to try. What a wonderful tale which put to rest that crazy adage! I haven't heard that one before, but you did a wonderful job with writing a story using it as a prompt. Keep up the good work and Keep On writing!
Wonderful! Wonderful! Great! Great! This is an excellent opening for a mystery and adventure story! There are so many directions you can go with this but I will leave it up to you. You probably think you should not continue writing but I think you should. You are an excellent writer. Please keep up the good work and KEEP ON WRITING!
Wonderful! Wonderful! I love the mental images I received from this story, and it's a great story too! Now, tell me, there HAS to be more! Keep up the great work! Keep on writing!
This was wonderful! Of course you already know what I'm going to say! POst the reast of it, please! I really want to see how my favorite pirate captain gets himself out of this fix! That's what happens when you lie, you have to keep on lying to keep up appearnces. Great wrok! Keep on writing!
This is a great story! I had to read it over twice to get the true meaning of it, but I got it. Errol IS the monster, and he would kill anyone to get money! He had killed another man in order to cover the fact that HE was killing people! What a horrible ruse, all for the money! Keep up the good work!
This story gets "gooder and gooder". The Shifters though they had a surprise for Athenais, but she had one for them! What came as a real surprise was the fact that the Shifters want help "humanity" as well as their own race. Destroying the Millennium Potion will rid both races of that plaque. Excellent story. Keep up the good work!
This was a excellent follow-up to your first installment! I loved the way you introduced and described each of the Beetle's crew. I expected the crew to be all male, and was pleasently surpised to find it wasn't. However, I don't like the fact that Fairy not only had big ears but a big mouth which can spell trouble with a capital "T". Keep up the good work!
Wow! What a great opening chapter! The mystery of who the three guys were was kept up until nearly the end of the story, which was an excellent move. I just found it rather strange that Athenais didn't have any of her crew with her during this exchange. Usualy the captain of a ship keeps his or her second in command in tow. This was an excellent story! Keep up the good work!
I loved this story because it brought back memories of my childhood in New York City and it opened my eyes to what you experienced as a child. I felt like I was right there. Expecially when the thunderstorm came rolling in! Great story! Keep on writing!
Thank you so much for such a wonderful and heartwarming story! It brought tears to my eyes in the end, and I found myself cherishing Lucky as much as you did. Great job! Keep up the good work!
I loved this little story! Yes, it does work! I would love to see it expanded into a full story, because there are many gaps that can be filled. I especially love the conversation between husband and wife in the restaurant! That was a howl! Pardon the pun. Keep up the good work!
DOn't get me wrong but this chapter kind of threw me for a loop after the first and second chapter. I thought it was well-written, but I didn't really see how it fit in. Except to establish that Ziti is an amature detective and is obviously good at what he is doing. Lots of insight into Ziti. Good Chapter.
This opening chapter was quite a surprise! I really got into it, rooting for the main charactor (Ziti - like the Italian noodles?), and everything quickly goes to hell, and it turns out to be a video game? You really got me there! I was left speechless! Superb job!
THis story is hard hitting and realistic! The battle scenes are knuckle bitters and hairasing. You don't know what's around the corner until it hits you in the face! Amazingly, our hero Joseph is there to meet the challange! Will he be brought low by the two words "Hello Joseph." I eagarly await the next installment! Excellent job! Keep up the good work!
This really made me laugh out loud. Then think "Oh-oh, that sounds like something that could happen to me. . . " . We all know about those conversations we have in our heads. This was a great one! Keep up the good work, and keep on writing!
This was such a wondeful story. I loved the interaction between the cats ( and dog ) over Pork Chop. It looked like they were going to eat Salty too! In the end, I'm glad Prok Chop had made a friend and was safe from harm. Keep up the good work!
What a wonderful story! I thought the story was talking about some kind of animal, but when it turned out to be Human, I nearly freaked! I'm not even going to ask where Humans would be kept in a zoo! Great story! Definitely keep on writing!
WOnderful memories of times past. Regrets that more time could have been spent with your Grandmother. Something that we all feel. Great work. Keep on writing!
Sweet, simple and to the point. This sounds like this co-worker is either a supervisor or a worker who has been there a long time and really knows her stuff. And she has not "grown stale" like most workers do once they know their job "like the back of their hand". They get slack and lazy and don't care about their job anymore. But this worker still does! She is a heroine! Great job! Keep on writing!
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