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Review of The Crimson Angel  
Review by erika3247
Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
HI....I liked your imagery and the very elegant way you describe the scenery and actions without into too much detail. Your words are often like poetry and they paint a very clear picture of what it going on. I like the story line and was immediately sucked in. You have a great sense of getting right to the action, as well. My only criticism thus far is it's immediate and hard to overlook similarity to a storyline I remember from "Kill Bill II" I believe. (Maybe it was the first Kill Bill film, I'm not sure, they reference each other in flashbacks, so I get confused). At any rate, if you haven't seen the films or read the scripts, you might want to do this to differentiate your story from something that already aired to such a wide audience. (Just a suggestion). As a woman, (I don't know if you are male or female and I don't mean to suggest anything disrespectful either way), I personally felt a bit annoyed with the whole "oh, she's so beautiful" commentary/description of the "damsel in distress." I may be over-reacting a bit but it seemed a tad irrelevant to mention her beauty at that moment, as he's standing there, gawking at her while she's obviously in trouble and in pain. Maybe he could notice that , or at least spare us the comment until AFTER he saves her? Maybe not....I don't know....
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