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Review by Fancy
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
OMGoodness! This was AWESOME! I loved it! And I read it for FREE. LOL.
Thanks,
Fancy
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Review by Fancy
Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
FANCY'S REVIEW

Item Reviewed - the monster i created

*Flower3* IN MY OPINION
I was initially confused but ended up liking this poem.

*Thumbsup* WHAT I LIKED
I really liked how you described the intense thoughts and feelings. I also found it very interesting how the writer admits to creating a monster with their own actions (lying, betrayal, cheating, etc.).

*Thumbsdown* WHAT I DISLIKED
I got a little confused after the following stanza:
"I lied.
I was dishonest.
I betrayed you.
I cheated."
The piece starts off like a regular love poem. It then goes it to the "betrayal" and you question the other person, not taking responsibility for your own actions. It seems very logical to me that a person would change and stop loving someone if they were cheated on and lied to. It isn't until the end that the writer admits to being responsible for creating a monster.

*Flower5* GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATIONS/TYPOS
None that I noticed.

*Idea* SUGGESTIONS/COMMENTS
I would suggest that you include the idea that you created a monster somewhere in the poem, BEFORE the ending. I think it would make the piece stronger if you added the phrase "the monster I created" throughout the poem somehow, acknowledging your part in it. Just an idea.
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Review of Dreams  
Review by Fancy
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
FANCY'S REVIEW

Item Reviewed - Dreams

*Flower3* IN MY OPINION
I found this item while browsing someone's review page. I am glad I did. I really liked this poem.

*Thumbsup* WHAT I LIKED
I really liked the subject matter of this poem. The idea, that though our childhood dreams are lies we should still hold out hope, inspires me. I liked the contrast of the lying dreams and the quest for meaning. It does truly give one hope. You have done a terrific job describing the change in dreams.

*Thumbsdown* WHAT I DISLIKED
In all honesty, there was only one thing I would say I "disliked" and that was the ending. I felt a little disappointed at the end. The poem felt very honest and truthful. It felt like it was leading the way to some big epiphany about life. The last line, "Dead past fades away," just didn't seem like the grand finale that I was expecting. That line made me feel a little let down.

*Flower5* GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATIONS/TYPOS
I saw none.

*Idea* SUGGESTIONS/COMMENTS
I know that all writers are different and I would never suggest that my ideas are better. I simply am giving you a suggestion. If it were my poem, I would either rewrite the last line to be more climatic or I would add another stanza. I believe this poem can be more. I think you miss a great opportunity to make a grand statement at the end.
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Review of My Broken Man  
Review by Fancy
Rated: ASR | (4.0)
FANCY'S REVIEW

Item Reviewed - My Broken Man

*Flower3* IN MY OPINION
This was a well written poem full of emotion. I felt the passion of the love AND the devastation of the heart break. Good job!

*Thumbsup* WHAT I LIKED
I initially read your poem because of the description. It intrigued me. Anything about heartbreak usually does. The subject matter was heart wrenching. I believe many women who read this poem will be able to relate to this type of "broken love." I think the words and phrases you used really show how dysfunctional this relationship was. I can remember feeling this kind of love. At the same time, I could totally feel your pain.

*Thumbsdown* WHAT I DISLIKED
There was nothing I really "disliked" about your poem. But I have some ideas you could incorporate into your existing piece. Please see SUGGESTIONS below.

*Flower5* GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATIONS/TYPOS
You have a typo at:
He kept a bottled in his hand. Should be bottle.

*Idea* SUGGESTIONS/COMMENTS
The following are just suggestions. Everyone has their own ideas on how a piece should be written. In no way am I trying to say my ideas are better. Just something different you can think about.

Where you write:
He kept a bottle in his hand,
while a razor stayed at my wrist
The rhythm seems a little off. I believe you could have better rhythm there if you change it to:
He kept a bottle in his hand,
I kept a razor at my wrist

Where you write:
Our love was as dead as half the stars
shining in the sky
I completely understand that stars shine long after they are dead. But the word "shine" really takes away from the idea that your love was dead. Is there another way you could write it with out using the word shine? I just think it would have a stronger impact if you didn't refer to the stars as shining.

Where you write:
Now though, I've known hopeless love,
I think "now" is unnecessary. It messes with the rhythm. I think it would sound just as good if you wrote "Though, I've known hopeless love,"

One last nit-picky thing...The title is good but I think it would be better titled "Broken Love."

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Review by Fancy
Rated: E | (5.0)
FANCY’S REVIEW

Item Reviewed – Dear Me WINNER: Crossroads

*Flower3* IN MY OPINION…
Very well written. Congratulations on the win!

*Thumbsup* WHAT I LIKED
This was phenomenal. I really liked the way you expressed yourself. The letter was clearly stated and I could totally sympathize with you. This makes me want to write my own Dear Me letter.

*Thumbsdown* WHAT I DISLIKED
There was nothing I disliked.

*Flower5* GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATIONS/TYPOS
"whispers don't reach me above the family din." = Did you mean family den?

*Idea* SUGGESTIONS/COMMENTS
I don't really have any suggestions other than keep on writing.
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Review of Drowning in Ink  
Review by Fancy
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
FANCY’S REVIEW

Item Reviewed – Drowning in Ink

*Flower3* IN MY OPINION…
I think this is an excellent poem. I am so proud of you.

*Thumbsup* WHAT I LIKED
I liked the subject matter and how you made it dark yet positive.

*Thumbsdown* WHAT I DISLIKED
Nothing really.

*Flower5* GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATIONS/TYPOS
None that I saw.

*Idea* SUGGESTIONS/COMMENTS
This is a great poem for a 16 year old girl. Keep on writing!
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Review of Equinox  
Review by Fancy
Rated: E | (5.0)
FANCY’S REVIEW

Item Reviewed – Equinox

*Flower3* IN MY OPINION…
This is a fantastic poem. I completely understand why you won Writer's Cramp.

*Thumbsup* WHAT I LIKED
I liked everything about this poem.

*Thumbsdown* WHAT I DISLIKED
I usually try to find one thing about a piece I don't like. I couldn't think of anything.

*Flower5* GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATIONS/TYPOS
None that I saw.

*Idea* SUGGESTIONS/COMMENTS
I really enjoyed this poem. It was not only a great poem, it was also interesting and educational. You did a great job with this prompt. You should be proud of yourself.
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Review of The Fire Inside  
Review by Fancy
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
FANCY’S REVIEW

Item Reviewed – The Fire Inside

*Flower3* IN MY OPINION…
This is a well written poem.

*Thumbsup* MY FAVORITE LINE
Swallow the last of the happy memories saved in writing.

*Thumbsdown* MY LEAST FAVORITE LINE
Some nights they appear almost extinguished. = The only reason I don't like this line is because it doesn't go along with the poem. You talk about the fire exploding and engulfing. There should be some climax at the end. The word "extinguished" makes this fall flat.

*Flower5* GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATIONS/TYPOS
None that I saw.

*Idea* SUGGESTIONS/COMMENTS
I would change the last line. Get out a good thesaurus and use a word that is comparable to explode or engulf.
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Review by Fancy
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
FANCY’S REVIEW

Item Reviewed – The Greatest Man I Ever Knew

*Flower3* IN MY OPINION…
This is a lovely personal story.

*Thumbsup* WHAT I LIKED
I like your description of your relationship with Mr.O.

*Thumbsdown* WHAT I DISLIKED
It's a little choppy. Doesn't flow as nicely as I would like.

*Flower5* GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATIONS/TYPOS
None that I saw.

*Idea* SUGGESTIONS/COMMENTS
This is a good piece. I think with some revisions, you can make it a great piece.
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Review of Couldn't Leave  
Review by Fancy
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
FANCY’S REVIEW

Item Reviewed – Couldn't Leave

*Flower3* IN MY OPINION…
This is a very well written heartbreaking poem.

*Thumbsup* WHAT I LIKED
I like the intensity of this poem.
My favorite line is: she died without love.

*Thumbsdown* WHAT I DISLIKED
I usually try to find at least one thing I dislike about a piece. There is absolutely nothing I dislike. So I'll just tell you what my least favorite part is:
When she couldn't run away
and staying equaled abuse

*Flower5* GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATIONS/TYPOS
None that I saw.

*Idea* SUGGESTIONS/COMMENTS
First of all, I thought I had already reviewed something of yours. But now I am not so sure. I'm glad I spent some time in your port today. I totally enjoyed the read. BTW, I am not giving you this rating due to the fact that we know each other. It truly is a solid 5 stars.
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Review by Fancy
Rated: ASR | (4.0)
FANCY’S REVIEW

Item Reviewed – Self-loathing is a complicated issue

*Flower3* IN MY OPINION…
This is an emotional, heartbreaking and authentic piece.

*Thumbsup* WHAT I LIKED
I like how believable it is. It feels like I know this person; like I'm in their head.

*Thumbsdown* WHAT I DISLIKED
The third paragraph (They assure you...) - It seems to be a stronger piece without it. For some reason, the part where you say "It stings you, because they’re telling you you’re just being silly;" seems to take away from the piece. It makes it feel less serious.
The beginning doesn't flow as nicely as the middle and the end. Not really sure why.

*Flower5* GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATIONS/TYPOS
None that I saw.

*Idea* SUGGESTIONS/COMMENTS
Keep on writing! I really enjoyed your piece!
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Review of the first day  
Review by Fancy
Rated: E | (3.5)
FANCY’S REVIEW

Item Reviewed – the first day

*Flower3* IN MY OPINION…
This is a nice little poem.

*Thumbsup* WHAT I LIKED
I liked the theme of the poem.
I liked the repetition of "tick tock, tick tock."

*Thumbsdown* WHAT I DISLIKED
I have done this for eleven years, why do I think it will always be different?=It should be two sentences.

*Flower5* GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATIONS/TYPOS
Is there a reason you aren't using capitals?

*Idea* SUGGESTIONS/COMMENTS
I think you should go through this piece and edit it.
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Review by Fancy
Rated: E | (5.0)
FANCY’S REVIEW

Item Reviewed – She Called Me Daughter

*Flower3* IN MY OPINION…
I completely understand why this won the Journey through Genres contest.

*Thumbsup* WHAT I LIKED
I know people don't like to get reviews without any constructive criticism. However, I really do like everything about this poem.

*Thumbsdown* WHAT I DISLIKED
Nothing

*Flower5* GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATIONS/TYPOS
None that I saw.

*Idea* SUGGESTIONS/COMMENTS
Keep on writing. Great job!
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Review by Fancy
Rated: E | (3.5)
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Item Reviewed – Don't Call Me Shirley!

*Flower3* IN MY OPINION…
I liked this piece. I thought it was humorous.

*Thumbsup* WHAT I LIKED
I enjoyed the story line.

*Thumbsdown* WHAT I DISLIKED
I wouldn't put your address on the piece.Better be safe. *Wink*
The only think I disliked was this sounds more like a conversation with a friend rather than a written piece. It feels very informal. It's just my personal opinion. There's nothing necessarily wrong with that.

*Flower5* GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATIONS/TYPOS
There are a few punctuation mistakes, but I'm sure you can find them with careful editing. If not, let me know.
Between the third and fourth paragraph there should be a line space.

*Idea* SUGGESTIONS/COMMENTS
This review is offered in the spirit of giving you honest feedback. Nothing more. Nothing less.

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Review of Guru  
Review by Fancy
Rated: E | (1.0)
FANCY’S REVIEW

Item Reviewed – Guru

*Flower3* IN MY OPINION…
This probably could be a good poem if it was formatted.

*Thumbsup* WHAT I LIKED
I liked the subject and theme of the poem.

*Thumbsdown* WHAT I DISLIKED
The poem needs to be formatted:
i saw her
when i was ready to stand on my legs ready to face the world
the world i was scared to face

*Flower5* GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATIONS/TYPOS
You need to go through the poem and edit it. The "purposeful" misspellings make it very difficult to read (ie. i don one whr to go)

*Idea* SUGGESTIONS/COMMENTS
Format and edit this poem. I will gladly come back and re-rate it then.
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Review by Fancy
Rated: 18+ | (1.0)
FANCY’S REVIEW

Item Reviewed – The odd penguin

*Flower3* IN MY OPINION…
This is an odd story. I don't quite understand the point of the story.

*Thumbsup* WHAT I LIKED
I liked that it was about a penguin.

*Thumbsdown* WHAT I DISLIKED
It isn't really even a scene. My question is...what's your point?

*Flower5* GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATIONS/TYPOS
I can not review this section as you used no punctuation.

*Idea* SUGGESTIONS/COMMENTS
- I am just a humble writer myself. I would never be so vain to think my ideas are better than someone else’s.-

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Review by Fancy
Rated: E | (4.0)
FANCY’S REVIEW

Item Reviewed – Termination of the Guilty

*Flower3* IN MY OPINION…
This was quite an interesting poem.

*Thumbsup* WHAT I LIKED
I liked the theme and the story.

*Thumbsdown* WHAT I DISLIKED
Not all the words are true rhymes. One example: identity and correctly.

*Flower5* GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATIONS/TYPOS
None that I saw.

*Idea* SUGGESTIONS/COMMENTS
I suggest you go back over this piece and try to make the words rhyme a little better. But overall, it is a good poem.
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WRITE ON! You are a good writer.

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Review of Speakeasy  
Review by Fancy
Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
FANCY’S REVIEW

Item Reviewed – Speakeasy

*Flower3* IN MY OPINION…
It's a good start to a story.

*Thumbsup* WHAT I LIKED
I liked the man's POV.

*Thumbsdown* WHAT I DISLIKED
Well, there was nothing I necessarily disliked. I just think you need to expand this piece. It's not a complete scene yet. Keep working on it.

*Flower5* GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATIONS/TYPOS
None that I saw.

*Idea* SUGGESTIONS/COMMENTS
My only suggestion is to keep writing and finish this piece.
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Review by Fancy
Rated: E | (3.5)
FANCY’S REVIEW

Item Reviewed – words of wisdom and inspiration

*Flower3*IN MY OPINION…
I have a question: Why is this so short? Did the contest require it to be this short?

*Thumbsup*WHAT I LIKED
I liked the theme of the poem.

*Thumbsdown*WHAT I DISLIKED
I don't like how short it is. I think you can expand this a great deal. Also, it sounds repetitive and the title doesn't seem to go with the poem.

*Flower5*GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATIONS/TYPOS
None that I noticed.

*Idea*SUGGESTIONS/COMMENTS
I would do two things. One, expand the poem. Two, think about using another phrase other than "this world with me," so it doesn't sound so repetitive.
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Review of Song for L.A.  
Review by Fancy
Rated: E | (4.0)
FANCY’S REVIEW

Item Reviewed – Song for L.A.

*Flower3*IN MY OPINION…
This is a very nice poem.

*Thumbsup*WHAT I LIKED
I liked how it felt like song lyrics. Very well done.

*Thumbsdown*WHAT I DISLIKED
Nothing really. But I do feel like you can expand this piece.

*Flower5*GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATIONS/TYPOS
None that I saw.

*Idea*SUGGESTIONS/COMMENTS
My only suggestion is to expand this poem...maybe turn it into song lyrics. Also, you could give it a chorus. It really does seem like a song.
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Review of Glimpse (revised)  
Review by Fancy
Rated: E | (4.5)
I have changed your rating to a solid 4.5. The ending really works now. I love your revision.
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Review by Fancy
Rated: E | (3.5)
FANCY’S REVIEW

Item Reviewed – I have a thought...

*Flower3*IN MY OPINION…
Well written, short piece

*Thumbsup*WHAT I LIKED
I enjoyed reading your thoughts on the subject matter.

*Thumbsdown*WHAT I DISLIKED
I think you can expand this piece. It is too short.

*Flower5*GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATIONS/TYPOS
None that I noticed.

*Idea*SUGGESTIONS/COMMENTS
My only suggestion is to expand this piece to fit more of an article style editorial. This piece just seems too short.
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Review of Grey world  
Review by Fancy
Rated: E | (3.5)
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Item Reviewed – Grey world

*Flower3*IN MY OPINION…
You should probably reword some of this so the meaning is a little clearer.

*Thumbsup*WHAT I LIKED
My favorite part of the poem is:
When you stop loving,
you stop living

*Thumbsdown*WHAT I DISLIKED
It's a little confusing. I didn't understand the last line = is a man we hardly know!!!
Feel free to email me and explain the poem in more detail so I can get a better understanding of it.

*Flower5*GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATIONS/TYPOS
Title should be Grey World.

*Idea*SUGGESTIONS/COMMENTS
- I am just a humble writer myself. I would never be so vain to think my ideas are better than someone else’s.-
WRITE ON! You are a good writer.

Please kindly stop by my port!
This is a children's picture book ->"In Grandma's Belly (Revised)
This is a young adult poem -> "Diamond In The Rough
This is song lyrics -> "Invalid Item

THANK YOU FOR SHARING!!!

Be blessed and be a blessing,
Fancy
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Review by Fancy
Rated: E | (3.5)
FANCY’S REVIEW

Item Reviewed – Oh No! What Do I Do?

*Flower3*IN MY OPINION…
Nice, simple poem.

*Thumbsup*WHAT I LIKED
I liked that you talked about God and how he blessed you. God is good all the time!

*Thumbsdown*WHAT I DISLIKED
I don't like how the first sentence sounds.
"My landlord felt me a heavy nasty blow!"
Your landlord can't "felt" you a heavy blow. He "gave" you a heavy blow.

*Flower5*GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATIONS/TYPOS
Turning to God helped me very Mich! = very much!

*Idea*SUGGESTIONS/COMMENTS
I'm sorry if this actually happened to you. I will pray that God puts a hedge of protection around you.
- I am just a humble writer myself. I would never be so vain to think my ideas are better than someone else’s.-
WRITE ON! You are a good writer.

Please kindly stop by my port!
This is a children's picture book ->"In Grandma's Belly (Revised)
This is a young adult poem -> "Diamond In The Rough
This is song lyrics -> "Invalid Item

THANK YOU FOR SHARING!!!

Be blessed and be a blessing,
Fancy
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Review of Jeremy's Debut  
Review by Fancy
Rated: E | (5.0)
FANCY’S REVIEW

Item Reviewed – Jeremy's Debut

*Flower3*IN MY OPINION…
You should win this contest. Great job with the prompt.

*Thumbsup*WHAT I LIKED
I really liked the story. I especially liked the repetitiveness of the part with the rabbit coming out of the hat. Kids love it when stories repeat. They learn to memorize the words and it makes them feel like they're reading.

*Thumbsdown*WHAT I DISLIKED
Nothing.

*Flower5*GRAMMAR/PUNCTUATIONS/TYPOS
None that I saw.

*Idea*SUGGESTIONS/COMMENTS
Again, great job with the prompt. I hope you win.
- I am just a humble writer myself. I would never be so vain to think my ideas are better than someone else’s.-
WRITE ON! You are a good writer.

BTW, I just started a new contest today. Come check it out!
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Please kindly stop by my port!
This is a children's picture book ->"In Grandma's Belly (Revised)
This is a young adult poem -> "Diamond In The Rough
This is song lyrics -> "Invalid Item

THANK YOU FOR SHARING!!!

Be blessed and be a blessing,
Fancy
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