Hello, i am not gonna comment on the grammar and the sentence construction because I'm not really an expert in writing. Coming from a reader's point of view however, i would like to ask you if you want to impose something else when you wrote the words swig, mammary glands and ineffectual? I think, to be able to relate to readers one must write simply and avoid highfaluting words. When you want to say something go straight to the point that way readers will be able to follow you more easily. Thanks so much, I hope you get something out of this review and i hope you are not offended by my comments.
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