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Review by Forevermore
Rated: E | (5.0)
I have been trudging through the fiction on WDC and found most of it to be pretty cut and dry.

I am happy to say this was not the case with this little hidden gem. It's fictitious to the point of WTF and yet you've reeled it back and left me with a confused mind like I glad I read this but wtf did I just read.

Bravo. Fictitious absurdity at its best. This would make for a great animated short.

Kudos to you

With Quantum happiness
Signed
Forevermore
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Review by Forevermore
Rated: E | (4.0)
Well written and pretty straight forward kudos to you
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Review by Forevermore
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
I have to argue that be a slave to the system.

Is not the same a being a person forced into slavery?

Being a slave to the system is a choice one can simply opt-out of.

You can't opt-out of forced slavery.

If you try to opt-out of forced slavery.

You'll understand the difference between being a slave of the system and be forced into slavery.

As for forgetting, I got an example of liberty for all. 4th of July is a day that Americans celebrate as their stand against tyranny in all forms although history tells us that it in celebration of the U.S. won its independence from a tyrannical ruled foreign government.

I believe that every firework that I hear on that day is a group of people saying.

We live our lives in the pursuit of life and liberty. If we can have these things give us death.

Maybe if more people saw the world the way I do it might be a far better place.


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Review by Forevermore
Rated: E | (3.0)
This is a played-out concept. Which is very near the concept of Garfield. Although the type of humor does not meat the same as level of Garfield as well. This is by far no where near as good as your other pieces. However I'll be damn if you can't write. Again this is well writen. Kudos to you
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Review of A Bad Abaddon  
Review by Forevermore
Rated: E | (4.5)
Well written piece. Kudos to you
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Review of Riot  
Review by Forevermore
Rated: E | (4.5)
Patternless pattern of nature

This line is dripping with underlying meaning.

Bravo...... Bellissimo
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Review by Forevermore
Rated: E | (4.0)
Well written, nice and tidy.

However the dog was a perfect angel until this Lil once was hobbit like creature snatch her up and petted the dog then said. My Precious.
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Review of Sticky Situation  
Review by Forevermore
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Umm, damn if you can't form an agreement. My father was a biologist that specialized in the infection rate of virus and bacterium. I quote him. "Vaccination is not the natural order of the human body. A vaccination is forcing the human body to produce antibodies. This type of force can lead to unforeseen compensation in a small child and even an adult with at-risk health concerns. i often recommend being fully aware of all risks involved with vaccination. After all, it is a type of genetic manipulation."

Yes, I was vaccinated but not till I was 5 then when I was 10 and 15. I get your point.

Your article was well written and I enjoyed the reading of it. I hope you keep this type of passion in anything you write.
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Review of Lost Boy Found  
Review by Forevermore
Rated: E | (4.5)


Woot primes. Bravo
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Review of in my blacks  
Review by Forevermore
Rated: E | (4.0)
Very well done. Kudos
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Review of My Moods  
Review by Forevermore
Rated: E | (4.0)
Nice easy to read block format.
Well constructed.

Kudos to you.
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Review of Lust  
Review by Forevermore
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
I was going to make a creepy joke about how a serial thinks. I decided not too sort of.

The structure of the work was well written in my opinion.
It seems to have been written to have no hidden under meaning to each line readed.
Very straightforward.

Very nice clean work. Kudos
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Review of The Great Plan  
Review by Forevermore
Rated: E | (4.0)
Very humorous indeed. Well written. Kudos to you
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Review by Forevermore
Rated: E | (1.0)
The next time you feel the need to use colored text try to keep colorblind people inmind.

I happen to be colorblind to red so I could only red. The color red appears as grey. Lil known affect of puting red color on white for my type of colorblindness is I can not see the red at all.

You get 1*. As for unintentionaly being an @**#0$3. I gave you 450 gp
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