I am rating this not on Grammer and spelling of which I found Many.
This is being rated on conted, the way the story flowed, the humor and keeping me interested.
It flows well until you run into grammatical and spelling problems, then it slowed my reading down as I am much like you in that area.
Very humorous ending and fun way to find out what happens when you test yourself.
I am including this on the reviewing page so others can help you make this piece better.
I see why you won in this contest. Very good. Hopes for you to write more messages from beyond. Remember your Dreams tell you things, Listen to your instincts and go with the flow.
Respect and Listen to your 6th senses. Intuition is there to warn you and tell you when it is safe. Try to remember this in all your writings. I am looking forward to reading more about these things.
Awesome write! Understandable with the next entry in your portfolio.
Oh Yes! Exactly what I meant in your last pieces, A True Cut Above, with simple elegance. Flows well and tells exactly what I feel when I read this. In Missouri we had rain today to water my gardens. Brings this Calming Peaceful Poem right to life. I Thanked the Lord for the rain and will always remember this.
Oh Yes! Bravo! Of course, I really believe this is a cut above. This sounds like it flowed gently and tenderly through your fingers. Like creating Magic, of sorts. Is this what it felt like to write this? A true Author writes from good past experiences as well as bad. I try to share the good. But really Love your pieces of heartache and loneliness. Like they speak to you. Being a time of good this one is Great!
Great Writing On All Three Pieces! I always like personal feelings and experiences to write and read about. I need to add much more to my port and You have just Inspired me greatly. Thank You! I hope you win your contests with these. All three I have read has been a "Cut Above The Rest."
Your Writing Is Quite Amazing. Very Different. Will rate the others I have read also. But was so interested in your beautiful deep pieces that I just wanted to keep reading. Straight from the heart A Real Cut Above. Very Deeply Emotional. Very Clear In It's Meaning.
Wonderfully well written story! Shows compassion in times of need. Heartwarming Indepth look at how we are all different in our own little way but yet still all the same. Shows how a little bit from everyone makes the world a better place. But also told from a quite different view that is Brilliant! Good Job!
Very Good! I like this. Great Job!
Beautifully written. Shows Hope in Dreams. You should write more about your dreams. They flow well from your fingers and I find you write best in this genre.
Always Remember Your Dreams All Have Meaning. Follow those dreams and you will find out why you are here. Blessings on your dreams and your life.
Wonerfully written story with some different twists, turns, and alot of unexpected fun. Grabs hold of you from the beginning and never lets go! Show a sense of community spirit and teaches lessons. I love your writing as always. Thank You for helping me make my works a cut above. Blessings, Gayle
Awesome! I have this too along with many other things. Mine turned out to be Lupus and MS. I am finally back here at Writing.com and trying to refill my port to leave for my Grandchildren and help while I still can. Blessings to you for having this in May. It has been a big support group for many here.
Good Survey! This is one of the more positive surveys I have seen here at Writing.com. Make A Better Difference In A Child's Life. That is the only thing I added to your survey. I hope many people take this, as it brings a higher level of thinking and living to an already pessimistic world. Way to go! Write On!
Very Funny! You use slang words a little much in this but I like the whole piece. A lesson learned a little to late and alot costly. Very humorous indeed. Write On!
Bravo! This is beautiful! Wonderfully written Sonnet. Brings memories of Fall, the clean crisp air. Swaying with the breeze and coming closer together as one Soul. Those days will be here soon enough again. I am looking forward to reading more of your port.
Yes I would support anything that keeps loving people together as family. A life long friend is a rare Blessing. And to fall in love with another and be able to spend everyday working and living for the better of the community and Earth, all should be welcome. After all we are only borrowing Earth for the short time we are here, from GOD. And I believe God knows who believes and who is good, kind and loving. Write On! Gayle
Wow! Did not expect this from the title. Very beautiful, plainly spoken with a simply wonderful message. If our spirit would live this way also in growing for the good and betterment of all mankind, we could all learn from this piece, about a tree. Write On! Peace, Gayle
Excellent story! Grabs your attention and has a very Blessed ending. Their lives taken would be just about the only thing worse. And then when you end this with a quote from 'Aesop,' it does fit. Something close to this happened to me in "the city" and I have never been back. Write On! Peace, Gayle
Hahahahahahahaha! You came up with this whole story out of a joke. It had me worried there for a minute. This is very good and keeps fooling you all the way through! This piece is enthralling, very well written, flows smoothly and has many twists and turns. Write On! Peace, Gayle
This is a great place for Seniors to gather. As I am a new Grandma of a beautiful girl I thought I better start hanging out with the Seniors. Do you all still gather here? If not, where is the Seniors group? I know most of us have busy lives to live, but I am back and helping where ever I can. Peace, Gayle
Very interesting story. Kept me reading as to want to know what happens next. I will be looking forward to reading on when you have more of the story written. Now I feel close to the people in your 1st chapter. In the future you might give a little more description of Majandra and Eltorin. Write On! Peace, Gayle
I have been avoiding reading this because of the title. It is not what I expected at all. Very funny and not at all rated as what I thought it would be. This is G rated and should stay that way. I hope this helps more people to read this as I am including this on the reviewing page. Write On! Peace, Gayle
This is great fun. You can see by my entry that I need to practice writing more archaism. This is quite fun! I hope others add theirs too. If more people would use the genteel ways to practice writing and speaking, the world would be a much kinder place. For some of us this kind of writing and speaking takes practice. Therefore making people think and study before writing and speaking. Write On! Peace, Gayle
"Leave them wanting more." This piece reminds me of that saying. Good ideas for good people. You might also add to this piece, we have to take care of the Earth GOD has let us borrow and our bodies which were created in his image. I'm leaving this on the reviewing page so others may read. Write On! Peace, Gayle
This whole poem rhymes except for one sentence, The last word in the fourth paragraph. Have you sent this to Oprah? She would love it. Best wishes, Write On! Peace, Gayle
This is so cute and funny! I laughed and laughed. This poem just struck my muse like a lightening bolt! Thank you for the raise in my spirit and the hundreds of ideas I now have. Others will get a kick out of this one so I am including this on the Reviewing page. Write On! Peace, Gayle
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