This short story is good in describing the plot of the story. I think that it would be better to continue on in detailing why Evan was so monotone what sparked him to be uninteresting, a loser, and everything in between. What he could change or improve before Crystal moved next door. In writing sometimes asking questions is the key to unlocking many key points on where your writing will go. Keep up the good writing.
This poem is beautiful and needs no corrections, have you ever heard the saying your first mind is your best mind. You were young when you wrote this never anticipating God's hand in your heart. We must understand that there's work to be done and yes God seeks out his people we must be ready and aware he has given us a task to do. Keep your focus because there is more to come. And when it does you will dig deep.
This young author has a vision, and promise in writing. His style of writing is interesting and keep the reader's attention. The storyline is authentic and clear in every since. I can say keep up the good writing and good storyline. I am encouraging this writer to be more creative in all his writings learn about this particular piece and build your self from there becoming stronger in your weak areas. (which I noticed the opening storyline needed proofing for grammar). The details in this story as well as the characters was excellent and intriguing work. I must say it's been some time since I read any good articles, books, or newspapers, but reading this story sent me to the movies and I was able to visualize the story as I am reading like putting myself there in that moment. Now I credit that to be good authorship. Thanks for the great story.
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