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Review by GG very happy
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Beautiful poem Meg! And a truely wonderful tribute to the ANZACs...I wish I'd found this before ANZAC day, I would have put it in my blog for that day. I still might put in a link for everyone!

I'm not positive that cries rhymes with rise...but at the same time I can't recommend anything to improve it, so best leave it be I suppose.

I love the pattern you've followed for this poem, it reminds me a lot of Tennyson in fact! Just beautiful to read. I'm sure team Australia is going to do brilliantly with you to write such quality for them!

Mel.
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Review of Never Leave Me  
Review by GG very happy
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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But did they ever find Abby?

Fantastic story Viv, I was engaged from the beginning, the characters really drew me in and I loved the way you gave so much history to the story in such a short piece.

I especially enjoyed the interaction of your characters, it really brought them to life and created an attachment with each. My favourite seen by far was with Marion and David at the beginning, their scene together was truely touching and what made the story the most memorable.

Mel
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Review of Above The Clouds  
Review by GG very happy
Rated: E | (4.5)
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The imagery in this poem is just beautiful Harry. As always you've captured the moment perfectly! It reminded me so clearly of a scene I'd seen just like it flying into Thailand...that's what really made this come alive, the realism of it, while still seeming like a fantastical scene.

The dark skies toward the end of the poem created a great contrast and really brought me back to Earth. Kind of made me wish I could always live in the sky with a fluffy white view.

Mel.

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Review by GG very happy
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Being agnostic I struggled a little with this story. That however doesn't change the fact that it's a well written and original piece. The concept of a device of course is not new, but that factor that dogs know of god and perhaps know something we don't in relation to that was an ingenius stroke!

That language you used for Maury certainly suited his character, even defined him, I can't help thinking though, that I wouldn't want a device like that for some animals. I'm sure my sister's fox terrier would only say a litany of "Let's play, let's eat, let's play, let's eat." *Laugh* And no doubt my cat would talk down to me...I'd prefer not to hear him I think.

I think you made good use of the length you used and I especially liked the way you told the story through actions and memories from a certain moment rather than trying to retell the whole story on a timeline. This way is much more enjoyable to read.

I think if you fleshed this story out more it could make a huge impact, the only thing restricting it now, in my opinion, is the short length...this stops us from getting as attached to the characters.

Fantastic read and I can't wait to see more! Mel
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Review of My Gift to You  
Review by GG very happy
Rated: E | (4.5)
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That is a lovely message to be sending out to us all, the last stanza of your poem really brings the whole together and involves us personally.

Your imagery is beautiful, I especially liked the line about the light on the snow, it adds a real glow to the cold opening and makes a great transfer over to the warmth of the scene inside.

Great work and I look forward to seeing more like it.

Mel.
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Review by GG very happy
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Kate!

The imagery of your poem is wonderful, you've really captured the moment of a summertime sunrise and given it incredible life of your own. The use of a Pleiades is a great choice and I'm really glad you didn't include and 'sh' combinations...I've seen that too oftne when people use an 's' and it completely spoils the effect.

I especially enjoyed the line Symphony wafts earthward,...that seems to truely capture the moment to me, I'll always remember it when I see a sunrise from now on.

Best of luck in the conteset!

Mel.


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Review by GG very happy
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Intuey!

I just love this jumble of sensations you've put together in your poem. They speak so much of the summertime experience and remind me so much of summer personally. most especially the sand as far as the eye can see.

You're poem has a great structure with a lovely rhyme that adds to the flow of the poem.

Best of luck in the contest!

Mel.


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Review of Summer Fun  
Review by GG very happy
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Cat-Claws!

First off...Happy WDC Birthday!

I really liked the fact that you attempted a shape poem...you really don't come across those very often on WDC. I can certainly see the hat shape of your poem though perhaps I wouldn't have recognised it if you had have mentioned it. The colour too was a great choice!

I like the rhyming pattern that you've used, it adds to the smoothness of the read, unfortunately I really don't think the third and fourth line do rhyme, but I've been wrong before and pronounciation can really make a difference.

I really think you've captured the summertime spirit though and expressed that wonderfully.

Best of luck in the contest!

Mel.


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Review by GG very happy
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Honored(song)bird,

Your poem is rambly which I liked, it gives a quality that is very different to your poem...lack of structure certainly appeals to me in poetry. It seems like it speaks from the heart.

While I liked this aspect of your poem, the poem itself seemed to lack a purpose. For me it failed to really communicate the summertime feel which would have made up for this. I did enjoy the brief insight into your life though...the things you appreciate and general way you live was nice to see.

Best of luck in the contest.

Mel.


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Review of A Jamaican Sunset  
Review by GG very happy
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi Kiya!

What a sweet love story. I loved the way you developed this story Kiya...I really wasn't sure where you were taking it at first, but it was fantastic to have such a sweet story to read.

I thought you left the story at a nice place. The promise of possibilities but no guarantees. It's a great ending for such a short piece. I was amazed the amount of background you fit in without boring me with recounts. Great work Kiya!

Best of luck in the contest!

*Heart* Mel.


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Review by GG very happy
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Cat-Claws!

*Laugh* Gosh you image made me laugh! The last dog especially is fantastic...you did a great job adding in the little comments and the fact that the eyes still show through the glasses is great. It really adds to the realism of the image.

Did you add in the sun rays at the top of the image? They make a great addition either way and certainly goes with the theme.

Best of luck in the contest!

Mel.


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Review by GG very happy
Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Kiya!

Oh I just love the message on this image...it's perfect for summer and just what I'm wishing for living in winter here in Australia. Your little character certainly reflects the message well and I love the little elements of summer you've included.

You've done a great job of putting the elements of your image together. They fit together well and beach balls especially look like they're floating on the water. Simply wonderful!

Best of luck in the contest!

*Heart* Mel.


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Review by GG very happy
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Oh Robin, I just love your sense of humour. This poem is skillfully done with a lovely twist to make me smile. The image of you singing, deliberately annoying your teenage daughter is such a riot. Reminds me of myself when I'm in class at school...deliberately being uncool to make my students groan.

Difference is the response, I love how your daughter joined in with the cheer, a beautiful image of a happy family at Christmas, enjoying each other. For me that will always be the true meaning of Christmas.

I'm teaching poetry at school at the moment. If it doesn't bother you, would you mind if I shared this poem with my students? I'm sure they'd get a kick out of it.

Write On! GG
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Review of Je Ne Sais Pas  
Review by GG very happy
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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I really loved the internal monologue during this piece Robin, this view into your brain is wonderful and has a very good balance with positive and negative thoughts. I especially loved how you described yourself gaining confidence as Renee talked up how positive swapping would be.

The tension of the moment was really well communicated, I could feel the pressure and I really love the line about the long arm of the principal. *Delight*

I spotted just one typo I shook my finger in her face and told her if she ad had any more bright ideas that she could keep

How mean that your sister so deliberately planned your torture...aren't sister frustrating! But you gotta love 'em!

Write On! GG
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Review of Spidey vs. Scooby  
Review by GG very happy
Rated: E | (5.0)
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*Laugh* I couldn't stop laughing while reading this simply fabulous piece...I would have just loved to have been a sepectator to this debate...I might have shook my head and walked away, but I'd have been laughing doing it!

You've really captured the language and personality of these people in a very short period of time, perhaps because these people are real it was easier, but I personally believe that can make it harder. The tone and actions are perfect to reinforce what everyone says.

BTW I thought the reasoning for getting Scooby were legitimate...but I'm with you...I've have choosen Spidey! *Laugh*

Write On! GG
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Review by GG very happy
Rated: E | (4.5)
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It is so nice to see the 3-5-3 form for a Haiku in someone else's port...it is the form I'm most familiar with and it was only here at WDC I discovered how rare it is!

Your first stanza communicates so much to me about what it is like to rely on sign...of course for you it isn't silent and the contrast between what is assumed by those who don't understand and those who rely on sign is fabulous.

Your second stanza is a wonderful metaphor for signing. It describes well what signing looks like, especially to those who don't understand it. I also liked the suggestion that one develops this more as they learn to sign...it is very well done.

The last stanza is more technical, but it rounds off this group of haikus well and is a good addition to the group.

Of course Haikus are meant to be used for describing nature, but all I can think is 'I don't care!'...you have quite a talent for writing poetry from what I can see.

Wrtie on! GG

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Review of Anger  
Review by GG very happy
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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This certainly makes a strong impression and anger is what it is all about! It's great how you've taken so many of the words we use to describe this emotion to create this poem, together they truely express all aspects of the emotion.

I especially liked the fact that you included the irrational part of anger. I know for myself that is a large part of it and I always feel regret afterwards that I was so out of control.

Thanks so much for sharing Viv! GG
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Review of Divorce  
Review by GG very happy
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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What a very sad poem, but heartfelt and honest, showing the very real effects of divorce on kids.

Divorce is such a difficult issue, so many people think they know the best way to deal with it, but I think in the end there is no simple answer. I liked the fact that you poem didn't try to preach what would have been best. But simply showed the devastating effect of divorce, not the solution.

I thought the line about the 'lessened childhood' was a little vaguer than your usual poems. I can imagine several circumstances for this comment, but I think that ambiguity is great under the circumstances.

Thanks for sharing a great poem once again! GG
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Review of I Wish I Had  
Review by GG very happy
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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Well I'm off to reply to all my letters and emails I've been neglecting now! I think this is a fantastic expression of not only what you have obviously experienced personally, but what we all do too. It's a great reminder too!

I do think though that regrets are always inevitable, we can't do everything we should...so we should let them get to us too much. Just enough perhaps so that we do enough. *Bigsmile*

Thanks for sharing Viv! GG
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