The title suggested to me that this piece is about someone.
This piece is wondering about the how they can compare themselves to a woman and the wonderful traits that she possesses. The poem is in three line stanzas, and uses a lot of emotion to convey meaning. I like that there is the hope that can possibly exist in this poem
Greg
The title suggested to me that this poem is a warning to someone.
The poem in three line stanzas, and tells the reader to Appreciate life , and what they have. Mainly because the author can't. I like how the author bestows this warning to the reader, and what can possibly happen if they do not heed the warning. I like the surprise at the end telling the reader why.
Greg
The title suggested to me that this piece might be about another person who is admired by someone.
The piece has a shape to it. It uses one word in the first line then one word is added to each line until the 5th line then one word is subtracted til then end when the author ends the piece on the same word as they began it with.
The author says so much in the piece, and I am moved by their very vivid description of the scene.
Good Job!
Greg
The title suggested to me that this piece might be about hopelessness.
The author uses 3 (Terchet) line verses. They are all unbalanced. This gives the piece a feeling of movement. The author uses an unusual song form of ABAABA. The author prefers to use an open or blank verse for the Rhyme scheme throughout.
Verse 1
The author begins with a very slow paced line then quickly accelerates in the subsequent to lines.
Chorus
The author use equal length lines in the chorus giving the piece a feeling on constant pace which is contrasted to the slow fast-fast pace in the fist verse.
Verse 2
The author slows down the pace then speeds up then slows down agin to give movement to the piece.
Verse 3
the author begins the verse with a quick paced line then slowly decelerates through the end of the verse.
Verse 4
The author keeps all the lengths in this verse equal giving the feeling of a constant pace
Chorus
See chorus above
Verse 5
The author uses a slow paced line then speeds up then slows down to a medium pace in the last line.
I feel this si a good piece, but could use some song structure change to make it a stronger piece.
Greg
The title suggested to me that this piece will ask for authors to write a poem a week.
After reading this piece, I like how the author started with a poem, and then gives the next author a word to use as a springboard into the next poem. I feel it give the reader a way of practicing skills to help improve their writing.
Great Job! We need more of these kind of campfires. I am including 100 Gift Points for such a wonderful job, and adding to the community of writers.
Greg
The title suggested to me that this piece might be about the TV show Get Smart. Their enemy was called KAOS.
As I began to read the poem, it sounded as if it were about the memory of someone who is no longer in their life, but the author tells me at the end it is about the love of a newborn child. I like the surprise I received at the end. It made me smile.
Greg
The title suggested to me that this might be about going through adolescence again in some form.
The author uses a consistent rhyme scheme of ABCB throughout the piece giving it a comfortable feeling. However, the author uses a perfect rhyme in the first stanza, then switches to using an Assonance Rhyme scheme in the second stanza. then changes to use a family rhyme scheme in the third stanza, and returns to the perfect rhyme in the fourth stanza. The author uses a variable meter in each stanza giving the listener a felling of uneasiness, bu then resolves it in the final stanza. I feel this uneasiness helps to brings out the feeling the author is portraying in the piece.
Over all I feel this is a very good piece.
Good Job!
Greg
The title intrigued me to want to take the poll. I feel that tis what a title is all about. To make the reader want to pick it up and find out more about it. It makes me think about how I am doing as a reviewer. I also learned that there is a segment of the writing.com population that does not or rarely gives reviews to what they read. 15% is a lot of people who can be doing more reviewing.
However, I think what would help me more as the reader of this poll, is that of those people who do not give as many reviews as they maybe should, What percentage are registered authors?, What percentage is just browsing for the first time.
Over all I think it is a good start, but I feel it could use some more questions to help the reader.
Good Job!
Greg
the title tells me tha tI will be reading a poem of sharing each other.
As I read the poem I felt as thoug I was reading a narration rather than a poem. As I contintued I could see the complexity of the poem, and how wonderfuly crafted it is. I like the rhyme scheme of ABABCC. I did not feel the rhythum as strongly as I would have liked, but none the less, it was there. This is such a wonderful tribute to a lost love one. thank you for sharing it with the world.
Greg
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