Theme is somehow natural and speaks out some personal story. But I believe you should read Maya Angelou. most of the your poem is blank verses without enjambment, short meter and short foot length makes the natural flow but again there is a lack of u know some type poetic aside. Treatment is natural and aspired of real life's happening as women often face in homes. make your message universal , use imagery of unseen impressions.. read Lord Byron, John Donne.
try to invoke romantic sadness.
Writing world needs such people who are honorable, determined and honest. its good to hear that you are a judge and you even like to write and I heard about your associations too. But we'll also wish your work to be public here. You are a man from practical field so its hoped you will share ethical and valuable experiments from your life. Literary circles are deprived of sexual racism they don't like it so you on your behalf should avoid such stupid things.
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