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for entry "Chapter Nine
Review by RICHARD
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
hi,
Matthew. The detail to stop being suppressed by the Titans is what they want to stop doing this to them. They have a liablity of a scientest who can possibly destroy the titan. However they will have look after him, as they were saying. The angel thinks that he will be of assistance for them.


Sincerely


Richard Edwards
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for entry "Chapter Eight
Review by RICHARD
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
hi,
Matthew. the piece is has still come alongs ways from the beginning. The story has a lot going for it, What are they going to do this? They still have to be alert considering the situation that they are in. They have to be careful of where they are doing.



Sincerely


Richard Edwards
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Review of The Swap Part 1  
Review by RICHARD
In affiliation with House of Sensual Prose  
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
hi,
Jmsnowy. That is unique, it makes me wonder what else is happening on earth. You have quiet an imagination to the readers veiw point of this happening there. It is indeed read able, it makes the reader desire to do this. THANK YOU FOR THE STORY.

sINCERELY


Richard Edwards
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for entry "Chapter Seven
Review by RICHARD
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
hi,
Matthew. It has a great deal of surprises there. You have made it important to read each piece with a sense of urgency to know more about the group who were insearch of the ruler of the community. To figure out what you want us to know. The information is handed to us, tidbit by tidbit. Great work thus far.

Sincerely



Richard Edwards
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for entry "Chapter Six
Review by RICHARD
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
hi,
Matthew, So, she is going to be sacrificed to give the titan its life, Her captives have allowed her to be malnutrished, Estelle has coem to aid her in her passage through time. She is going to try and allow her to be free of captivity, The piece is very good.

Sincerely



Richard Edwards
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for entry "Chapter Five
Review by RICHARD
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
hi,
Matthew that was quick thinking, but what happens when the g oubard awakens. Or is found dead. There are going to be questions asked no doubt the answers are not going to be are they. They have to retrieve her from there, that is what they are doing, but how do they do this with only two people? I know read on.
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for entry "Chapter Four
Review by RICHARD
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
hi,
Matthew. It seems that the girl is the same as the officer who she is to see. It was foolish of herself as being the only one who could do this. From what they have done she is now a prisoner. i suppose because she was wanting to capture him. She had a reason to fear him, I suppose.

sincerely


Richard Edwards
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Review of DRIVE-IN  
Review by RICHARD
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
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Ben. The story is great , It allows that the readers to know what they were feeling. This is his his first relationship. His uncertainity that he is feeling with her. What they are going to do? The realationship is new, he has to be able to learn from it.



Sincerely



Richard EDWARDS
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for entry "Chapter Three
Review by RICHARD
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
hi,
Matthew, The piece has a lot going for it. The enemy knows how to move efficently that they will be able to defficantly being able to destroy the humans who have come to be here As Wells said, we took the hill, but with heavy losses.



Sincerely


Richard Edwards
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for entry "Chapter Two
Review by RICHARD
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
hi,
Matthew, your story is good. It allows the reader to get know the characters and have a better understanding of the story and its merits. The key character knows what she has to do. Her function here is going to draw the reader in to be with her. In her exploites in the military on this planet. Her interest are going to help the faction that she is involved with, She is just getting to know the people who were there.

Sincerely\


Richard Edwards
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Review of poem  
Review by RICHARD
In affiliation with The Dark Society  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
hi,\
Midnight. The feeling you have is despair, there are others here who feel that way too. Speak with you heart and allow otehrs to listen to your words as they fall from your lips to arrive upon their ear. Speak so we who can help, can try to help. Believe we are there, each of us feels pain and despair at times. But we look around and see who is there, who will hold us. who will tell us a joke. Who cares for us? Are your friends.

Sincerely\


Richard Edwards
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for entry "Chapter One
Review by RICHARD
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
hi,\
Matthew. It sounds like she did not know waht she had gotten herself into, I take it there are going to be plenty of surprises for her
becoming a ghost. Her assignment was not supposed to be the front lines, but It seems that that is where she is going. There is going to hell to pay.\


Sincerely\


Richard Edwards
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Review of Gig's Eddy  
Review by RICHARD
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
hi,.
DyrHearte. That was a good tale, most parents would have hit the ceiling. In this case they did not. It allowed the reader to see how it effected the parents about their experimentation with booze. SWimming while drunk can be another story entirely. It was w
well writen. It allows the parents to be fair about their knowledge of kids.


Sincerely


Richard Edwards
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Review by RICHARD
Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
hi,
HL. the piece was well writen . It aowed em to visualize what you were describing to me . The beauty adn the delicate flow of words wea amizing. It drew me in like a man insearch of water in a desert. The work was sensul abd beautiful. The story was spicy, and hot.

Sincerely


Richard Edwards
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Review of poems 3  
Review by RICHARD
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
hi,
Midnight.Keep hanging on. The people you love know you are ill. However they need you there, as you were there for them. In times of trouble you were, when they had a new joke to tell you were there. Why because you care. Love is all anyone can do?

Be you,

Sincerely


Richard Edwards
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Review of Disease  
Review by RICHARD
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Henri, It seems like the town is armed to the teeth. Will Braedon be able to leave once they look over his RV. The situation seems dire, maybe it would be helpful if you were to explain as to what has happened here. Just thought, it seems like there is going to be alot of action in this story. Keep at it. Do not give up on it.


Sincerely


Richard Edwards
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Review of The Man Who Flew  
Review by RICHARD
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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Lindsay. That was unique, he would I believe have to file a flight plan with the air force or god. If he flies too high, they might object to him flying like that. It was a good tale. It could be considered comedy. I hope you are doing well.


Sincerely



Richard Edwards
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Review by RICHARD
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)
hi,
Audri. The thing that you must realize is, you are beauttiful. At times, we do not see it in ourselves, but others. the sun rises each day, to say hey. It is a new day, begin anew. Look what you can do. you have a voice. You can speak. You are willing to listen.

Sincerely


Richard Edwards
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Review by RICHARD
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)
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Elle, the story is going to be epic. That is a challenge, that has to be written with a great deal of work there. The opening explaining about noises that are within the house. Can be a distraction to a writer, they have to be able to think and that may prove difficult. I see the child is doing this. It looks good, I will take a look at it later.
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Review of FRIENDS  
Review by RICHARD
Rated: E | (5.0)
That is what true friends are, they share a cup of tea or coffee. Listen to your day, why because they are your friends. When things are bad, you can go to them, they help you pick yourself up and dust yourself off. When they need you, they know you will do the same. Why because they know you, through thick and thin. They are there. They never turn their backs on you. Why because you do it for them too.

Friends are what they are? Because they care.

Sincerely


Richard Edwards
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Review of Worthless Angel  
Review by RICHARD
Rated: E | (5.0)
I take it you talking about the unknown soldier. The soldier is buried without any commeration for his death. They did not know as to which unit he was from. He has never been identified. He was buried as one of many who died for the war's carnage. Soldiers who have become MIA are who he represents. His death is not worthless.



Sincerely



Richard Edwards
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Review by RICHARD
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
hi,
Pauline, that story has a lot going for it. It is not really an adventure, but a hope to survive as she has to flee from an upset dragon. She has to rely upon the elf, whom she has just met. She does not have time to stop to make his acquaince. She must flee as does he.


Sincerely


Richard Edwards
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Review of Girl troubles  
Review by RICHARD
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)
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Blue, relationship problems I think we as human's can relate to this matter. What is up with you and maple. I hope you have enough time for yourself there. No one knows what is really happening with anyone else unless they are willing to listen to each other.


Sincerely


Richard Edwards
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Review by RICHARD
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
hi,
Kelsey. It seems like memories of the past that have happened here presently from when the boy was young and what he learned through his life. Like when he was pursuing the ball across the road, learning to swim, and being with his girl. The things he recalls from those events.

Sincerely


Richard Ewards
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Review of Taffy  
Review by RICHARD
In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP  
Rated: E | (5.0)
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Audria.I have the same problem, that I love to write too, So, I spend quite a bit of time doing this. Unfortunately I do not know as to what I am going to create until I am finished with the peice. I have been dabbling with humor, could you please take a look at mother's day.


By me. It is a humorous piece.


Sincerely



Richard EDwards
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