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Review of The Amber'd Gown  
Review by JenP
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Rated: E | (4.5)
I am a writer just like you. I am not here to judge you but give you MY personal thoughts on something you have written. You may choose to take my suggestions to heart or simply blow them off. That is up to you. It is my honor to read your work and be able to add my two cents to it.


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My first impressions

You took a apple tree, one the simplest of things and wrote a beautiful poem about it. I love it! Not everyone can do that.



Flow

This piece flowed very nicely. I had no problems reading and following it.




Improvements

I found no mistakes in this poem. Great work!




Over all thoughts

Not many people can take something that some take for granted and give it a voice. You did this. Keep writing!

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Review of What Love Is This  
Review by JenP
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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My first impressions

I love it! What a love story you have told. When love is in the air there is no stopping it.



Flow


This piece flowed very well. I had no problems reading it.



Improvements


Personally I wouldn't change a thing.



Over all thoughts

You did a great job keeping the readers attention which is what I look for. I dont like to be bored. Keep writing!

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Review of Greed  
Review by JenP
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Rated: 18+ | (4.0)
I am a writer just like you and these things are just opinion.



Gerernal Thoughts:



Wow! What a story. I really enjoyed reading it. Greed is a terrible thing and the characters in your story really found that out.


Improvements:

I found no mistakes in this piece. If you decide to add to it maybe adding some more descriptive words about their surroundings. That is only IF you decide to add to it. Other than that I wouldn't change a thing.



What I liked The Most:



What I liked the most was how you kept the reader guessing what was next. It was a suspenseful story.


Overall Thoughts:



This is a great story with a message to all. You kept this readers attention. Keep writing!

Thank you for writing

God Bless

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Review of Fire Burning  
Review by JenP
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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*ButterflyO* I am a writer just like you and I am simply reviewing your piece to encourage you and give you my advice on how to improve. Thank you for that chance. I hope you enjoy my review.*ButterflyO*







First impression:


You got a good story going here. I can see your passion for writing in this piece.




What I liked:

What I liked is how you described his strength that he didn't know he had. When things happen like that we often develop "super human" strength. It's amazing. I also liked how you added in the sibling rivalry. Great work!



What I think could be improved:


You have a good piece here but I personally would change a few things. First I would space out the dialogue. What I am saying is that have a separate line for each time a different character speaks. Makes it easier to follow.

Also looks like you added something that didn't need to be there in this line: " 'K Mom, say goodbye to your teeth Brooke!" I laughed and headed for the door, and I could hear Brooke shrieking as it slammed shut.

See the extra ' ? Just something little.

Please do not be discouraged by these suggestions. They are merely that... suggestions.





Overall Thoughts:



You have a great piece going here. If I were you I would go back and work on it.


God Bless


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Review of He's Not Real  
Review by JenP
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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First impression:


This is a great piece. You did great describing your dilemma. You are right on thing.... there is no such thing as a perfect person.




What I liked:

What I liked is the words you used to describe this man. You did great. I can picture the situation in front of me as I read it.



What I think could be improved:



I found no mistakes in this piece. Great job!




Overall Thoughts:




This is a wonderful piece that captures the readers attention. Keep writing!


God Bless


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Review by JenP
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hi QueenOwl ~ A New Day Dawns

First Impression:

This is a short poem but to the point. We all long for that perfect someone in our life. Long distant relationships can be hard.

What I liked the most:

Is the words and places you used in this poem. You picked some great places to go and great words to describe how the writer is feeling.

Improvements:


I found no mistakes in this piece. Personally if i were you I would consider going over it again and maybe even adding more to it but that's just my opinion. This is a great piece.

Overall thoughts:

You captured this readers attention with the title and the actual poem. Great work and keep writing!


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Review of JUSTIFIED  
Review by JenP
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hi A*Monaing*Faith


First Impression:

Short and to the point is my first impression. We don't always have to write a long detailed poem to get a point across. You proved that with this poem.

What I liked the most:

What i liked the most is the 6th line. Money does not make a father. That's for sure.


Improvements:

I found no mistakes in this piece. Great work.


Overall thoughts:


This is a good poem with a very good message. Keep writing!


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Review of The Jester  
Review by JenP
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hi Sum1


First Impression:

This is a great poem. At first I wasn't sure what it was about but when I got to the end I was touched.

What I liked the most:

What I liked the most is how you described the performers feelings. I have done some public speaking and performing and I know how hard it is.

Improvements:


I read this poem twice and seen no mistakes or anything I would change. I like it just the way it is.


Overall thoughts:


This is a great poem that touches the reader. Children with cancer is no joke but there are great people out there that try relieve some of their pain. This jester did just that. Great work and keep writing!


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Review by JenP
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Rated: E | (4.5)
I am a writer just like you. I am not here to judge you but give you MY personal thoughts on something you have written. You may choose to take my suggestions to heart or simply blow them off. That is up to you. It is my honor to read your work and be able to add my two cents to it.


My first impressions

I knew this would be a love poem but didn't expect it go be as good as it is. Very good job writing this.


Flow


It flowed very nicely. I had no problems reading this.

Improvements

Usually I can think of something to improve but I like it the way it is.


Over all thoughts

We all need someone as the old saying goes and I'm glad you found that person. Keep writing.

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Review of Once we were Gods  
Review by JenP
Rated: E | (4.5)
I am a writer just like you. I am not here to judge you but give you MY personal thoughts on something you have written. You may choose to take my suggestions to heart or simply blow them off. That is up to you. It is my honor to read your work and be able to add my two cents to it.


My first impressions

Until I go to the end I really thought this was a greek God type of poem. It was even better! Personally I don't have kids but plenty of nieces and nephews and I have watched them grow before my very own eyes. It can be hard to watch.



Flow

It flowed very nicely. I had no problems reading this piece.


Improvements

i read this poem three times and could find no mistakes or anything I would change.


Over all thoughts

I imagine that all kids do what this kid did. I am pretty sure I did but as we become adults we learn to cherish our parents even more. Keep writing!

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Review by JenP
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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*ButterflyO* I am a writer just like you and I am simply reviewing your piece to encourage you and give you my advice on how to improve. Thank you for that chance. I hope you enjoy my review.*ButterflyO*







First impression:


My first impression was "wow". You took an awesome place and describe it very well. The words you choose were perfect.




What I liked:

We all have our "special" place and mine happens to be a beach. So I could really relate to this.



What I think could be improved:


I read this three times and could find no mistakes or anything I would change.




Overall Thoughts:



Like I said above we all have a special place where we go to get away from life and you did a great job describing yours.


God Bless


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Review of Black  
Review by JenP
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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First impression:


I write all different kinds of poetry myself. Some are dark like this one. I really like it. It is short and to the point.




What I liked:

Actually what i liked is how short it was. You took so few words and really expressed how just about anyone could feel.



What I think could be improved:


I found no errors in this piece. So, personally I don't think you should change a thing about it.



Overall Thoughts:




This was a short and to the point poem that could express how many have felt at some point in their life. Keep writing

God Bless


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Review of Our Love  
Review by JenP
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Rated: E | (4.5)
I am a writer just like you. I am not here to judge you but give you MY personal thoughts on something you have written. You may choose to take my suggestions to heart or simply blow them off. That is up to you. It is my honor to read your work and be able to add my two cents to it.


My first impressions

This is a great poem about true love. Something that is only found once in a life time.


Flow

This piece flowed very nicely. You picked some great words to describe your love.


Improvements

I found no mistakes in this piece. I see nothing that I would change.


Over all thoughts

Like I said above true love is something you only find once in a lifetime. You did a great job expressing that love in this piece.

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Review by JenP
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
I am a writer just like you. I am not here to judge you but give you MY personal thoughts on something you have written. You may choose to take my suggestions to heart or simply blow them off. That is up to you. It is my honor to read your work and be able to add my two cents to it.


My first impressions


As a abuse victim I had to read this piece. I know from personal experience that the scars of abuse never go away. It does become easier to handle though.


Flow

This flowed very nicely. It was not hard to read at all.


Improvements

If I were you I would add some more punctuation to this piece. That is just my opinion though. This opinion is just from the writing I do. For example adding periods and etc. Like I said this is just my opinion.


Over all thoughts

This is a heart felt poem that I enjoyed reading. I could feel your pain as I read it. Keep writing!

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Review of Our Inka  
Review by JenP
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Rated: E | (4.5)
I am a writer just like you. I am not here to judge you but give you MY personal thoughts on something you have written. You may choose to take my suggestions to heart or simply blow them off. That is up to you. It is my honor to read your work and be able to add my two cents to it.


My first impressions

First let me say that I am sorry for your loss. This is a great piece that truly expresses how you feel.


Flow


This piece flowed very well. I had problems reading it.

Improvements

I don't think you should change anything about this poem. It is perfect the way it is.


Over all thoughts

This is a great piece and I could picture the scenes as I read it. That's what I love about this poem. You truly impressed me with this piece.

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Review of White Water Life  
Review by JenP
Rated: E | (4.0)
I am a writer just like you. I am not here to judge you but give you MY personal thoughts on something you have written. You may choose to take my suggestions to heart or simply blow them off. That is up to you. It is my honor to read your work and be able to add my two cents to it.


My first impressions

My first impression is that this is going to be a good piece. The title is what caught my eye.



Flow

This poem flowed very nicely. I had no problems reading it.


Improvements

I read the poem twice looking for some type of change that could be made but found none. You used some great desciptive words and kept my attention.


Over all thoughts

My overall thought is that this is a great piece that really does describe the ups and downs of life. Thank you for sharing.

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Review of Desert Road  
Review by JenP
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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My first impressions

At first I wasn't sure if I was going to like this piece or not. I am not sure why but once I started reading I couldn't stop.



Flow

It flowed very nicely. I had no problem reading this piece.


Improvements

I read this three times looking for things that I think could be changed but found none. I can see your heart in this and I think that's great.


Over all thoughts

Overall thoughts is that this piece has a message that sometimes we need comforted. When that person drove up and walked with you letting you know that it would be okay it showed that everyone needs someone. At least thats my impression.

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Review of Dear Me  
Review by JenP
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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I am an author just like you. My suggestions are just that... suggestions. You need not to follow them. I am here simply to encourage you through suggestions and good feedback. God Bless


What I liked the most:

What I liked to most is the ending. How you expressed that the best thing to do is take in your surroundings. I love it.

Improvements


I see no room for improvement. To me it is perfect and very touching.



FLOW:

It flowed great. I had an easy time reading it.


OVERALL THOUGHTS:

First let me say this... I am sorry for your loss of your daughter. Please accept my condolences. I also think its great that you are raising your grandson.

This entry really touched me. You are completely right, we need to make a resolution to take in our environment.

Thank you so much for sharing.

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Review of Beyond The Veil  
Review by JenP
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
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First impression:


I wasn't sure what to think at first. As I read I was in awe. What a great piece.




What I liked:

What I liked is how you described Adam and Eve and their fall. You did a great job with describing everything from their fall to the sacrifice of Jesus.



What I think could be improved:


I read this three times and could not find anything that I would change. I can't say that about a lot of writings.


Overall Thoughts:



Overall thoughts are that this is a great piece. It really touched my heart as a believer. The way you described everything is just totally awesome. Thank you for sharing this with me.
God Bless


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Review by JenP
Rated: E | (3.5)
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Gerernal Thoughts:


As sports fan for 30 years,I can appreciate this poem. You did a great job explaining what each team is aiming to do.
Improvements:


What I liked The Most:


Waht I liked the most was the second stanza. You described what each team must do and is aiming to do. Very good job.

Overall Thoughts:


This is a good poem for sports fans. I do feel however that you could add more to it. For example make it longer and explain how they got there or something like that. This is just my opinion though.


Thank you for writing

God Bless

JenP


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Review of My Family  
Review by JenP
Rated: E | (4.0)
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First impression:


My first impression is that there is a special love family members have. When you are a close knit family that love is even stronger.




What I liked:

What I liked is how you wrapped it up with this line:

Here am I, before you once more,
Speechless.

You can tell you are in awe of this.



What I think could be improved:



Seems like everything is in order. Punctuation and flow are great.



Overall Thoughts:



When you find love hold on to it.


God Bless


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Review of Snow Angels  
Review by JenP
Rated: E | (3.5)
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*ButterflyO* I am a writer just like you and I am simply reviewing your piece to encourage you and give you my advice on how to improve. Thank you for that chance. I hope you enjoy my review.*ButterflyO*







First impression:


My first impression is that this is a very short poem. To be honest, I didn't think I was going to like it but I did.




What I liked:

Is how you put so much emotion into so few words. That's why I didn't know if I would like it or not. You did a great job proving me wrong.



What I think could be improved:


I would consider making this longer. Maybe dividing up some of the lines. This is just an idea. It is good the way it is though.



Overall Thoughts:



This is a great poem. There is nothing like a child's love and laughter.


God Bless


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Review of MIA GRACE  
Review by JenP
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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First impression:



My first impression was to cry. You did such a good job writing this that I felt like I was there with you. You are such a good writer that you bring the reader to the situation.



What I liked:

What I liked is the last line "Born sleeping". My Mom had 2 miscarriages so I kinda know what it is like as a sister.



What I think could be improved:


Nothing.





Overall Thoughts:




As a writer I attempt to bring the reader to me and the situation. After reading 2 of your works I can see you do that. Very good job. Keep it up!!!



God Bless


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Review by JenP
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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First impression:



Wow, what a great poem. All the wives that lost their husbands in war will appreciate this poem. You should compassion and understanding.



What I liked:

My favorite part was the ending stanza. God's telephone, what a great tool! Very good job.



What I think could be improved:


I looked for mistakes and improvements and truthfully I could not find one. None at all. You did a great job.





Overall Thoughts:



This is a very good poem filled with a lot of emotion. I lost a uncle in WWII. I did not know him but my grandfather talked about him a lot. I know he would love this poem. I encourage you to continue to write.



God Bless


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Review of Disillusioned  
Review by JenP
Rated: ASR | (4.0)
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First impression:


A lot of people feel the way the writer did in this piece. We all go through our "I'm in love with this person" stages. Some more than others.




What I liked:

What I liked the most is how you related to everyone. I also liked the words you choose to describe the stages of love the writer went through.



What I think could be improved:



I went through this a few times looking for mistakes. I could not find one. Good job!




Overall Thoughts:



This is a good piece and a good example of what we go through in life. Great job!



God Bless


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