Hello! I completely agree with you in this poem. Sometimes I think that people just don't like seeing the facts, when it doesn't affect them. If you told them climate change would make them lose all their money or their house, I think more people would be worried about it. People also don't like to admit their mistakes. I love this piece (and your username). Great wording and great job!
Hello! I loved this piece and cannot wait to see the second chapter. I was a little confused at first, after all Orion is the name of the constellation, which is named after the Greek Hero Orion. I was expecting something a little bit different. However, I am not disappointed, I cannot wait to see how you work in Calliope and what part she has to play. Will she be a bear, or a human? Only time will tell. I would say that I wouldn't say things so obviously sometimes. Though some things need to be explained, explain them through the dialogue or some other way. Like when you describe his home country. We don't need to learn everything right now, we can learn some more stuff later throughout the book. You want to keep the reader involved so they'll want to keep reading. All in all, a great piece, with a good foundation for a good novel. Hope you keep writing!
I... I... wow. I can feel the tears behind my eyes. You brought these characters to life in such a way as I have seen only in published authors. I wish you the best of luck. This is, one of the best pieces I have seen written on this website. I encourage you to take this writing to the next level. Have you aver thought of writing a novel? If not, I would seriously consider it. And if not that then a book of short stories. Your writing needs to be shared with the world. Especially in this day and age.
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