Great job. This poem has great rhythm and it's a very interesting subject choice and interpretation of "Midnight Hero". I really enjoyed your vocabulary, I love big words! My favorite one was "intrinsic", it's not one I get to use often.
I wish I could give you some advice on how to improve it, but you did such a good job and I like it just the way it is.
This is wonderful. I love the style and rhythm. You are great with words and convey a very wonderful, heartfelt message that I think people should read:) Great job!
This is beautiful. The imagery and feeling you create with your words is stunning. You allow the reader to really tap into the struggle and the pain of the situation.
My favorite piece, I believe, was
"Please be strong you tell me
'Cause you want to stay
So I end up screaming
You should run away"
It shows the side of the friend as well and the urge they feel to be there for the narrator.
Wonderful job, there is really nothing I can complain about. :)
I love this. I am also someone who truly loves nature for everything it is and I can appreciate everything you say in this poem. I love the rain and playing in it in the middle of summer when it really pours down:) It's so relaxing.
I liked how you compared the raino n the ground to a mirror, showing the fascinating changes that rain showers create in the world.
You create very beautiful imagery with your words and put the reader in your shoes. :)
I think you worked brilliantly with the prompt. You allow the imagination of the reader to run wild and see everything you question. This is very well written.
This is really neat and creative. It's written in a very believable way, as if someone is really documenting it. My only advice would be to either indent the paragraphs or skip lines. It takes away from the flow of the words and makes it a little harder to read when it's all together, but other than that it's great:)
Oh, boy is writing a lot of work! I totally agree. But it's a great time. I like the way this encompasses all of the possibilities of writing and all of the time that we can spend writing in every day life. It's humorus as well, which is a nice plus.
Wonderful job:D It's a very touching story. I like how well you fit in all the details, including a beginning, middle, and end, in such a short amount of words.
You are a wonderful writer. You have good style and rhythm. The way you sum up the story of Jesus in so few words, but with such success is impressive:)
I like this a lot. It's very human and raw. We all struggle with the negativity in our lives and in ourselves. And we all fight to gain the strength to forgive the people and things that hurt us ,which is one of the hardest things to do. Wonderful job:)
I really like this. It actually reminds me of a character that I wrote named Draven who hears a voice in his head. It has a good flow and great wording.
This is wonderfully written. You are a very descrpitive writer and your words make it easy to get lost in the story. It is also very thought provoking and you get the point of the story across while still being subtle. Wonderful job.
This is really interesting and thought provoking. My only advice is that maybe you should split it in to paragraphs. It sort of hurts the eyes to see all of it mushed together as one. But I understand if that's just your style:)
This is very helpful. I am currently in the first draft stage of my book, but when it comes time to edit, I will probably be coming back to this for some assistance. Great job:)
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