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for entry "On Lake Wiliston
Review by Judiang
Rated: E | (3.5)
Hey Setre,

I liked your story, it was folksy, historical (rings a bell) with a nice wrap at the end. Aside from some typos and paragraph formatting problems, it was structurally fine. Nothing that a bit more editing won't take care of.

I couldn't get over the feeling that it was more of an expositional essay combined with some poetic license told by an old timer. While this was done well, I look forward to you moving away from the shaggy dog jokes and old timer stories to something more daring. Clearly you write well; you should stretch yourself more.

Judi
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for entry "The Parking Ticket
Review by Judiang
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hi Setre,

This was a good little yarn. It read like a different version of a shaggy dog story. The dialogue moved along at a good click. I should have seen the ending coming. LOL!!!! An enjoyable read.

Judi
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Review of Late Autumn  
Review by Judiang
Rated: E | (4.0)
Hello Jaelita,

I really enjoyed the imagery in this poem, particularly the first one implying aging suddenly falling upon the protagonist all at once. There is sad wistfulness but a quite grim resignation as s/he waits in the car, watching life continue on.

I don't know much about the "rules" of poetry, not writing poetry myself, but I know what I like and I like this. Very well done. Hoping to see more work. :)

Judiang
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