Suggesion: Poetry of any kind needs to convey some message to its readers and lines be written the way it may have impact in the mind and soul of readers. In this poetry, I find few lines are too long, that may distract the very attention of others.
NOTE: I am not a professional reviewer, and this is up to you only how you imbibe these suggestions.
Hi Max, thanks for sharing such nice non-fiction. I really enjoyed it.
Review:
Title is perfect that matches with the story
Flow: Ideas and theme flows smoothly .
Theme is good about a fantasy, but in your case it actually did happen.
Your friend, Shruti Gupta, a perfect indian girl.
MY MAIN ISSUE:
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Here the boy, main character, and Shruti Gupta seems married as both of them have families. In case if the love theme goes ahead with marriage between them and the story may end there. In case if this had been the ending, two families might have been ruined, one boy's family and another family of girl as they are already married. How this could have been the ending. A reader like me can never accept such ending. Sorry only my views.
@ Title says the girl has lost everything, but after reading the story I could find the answer
@ Though the story is about a girl but story seems silent on this issue. My feeling says she is sister of younger brother.
REVIEW PART:
Title is good, if little part is clear about what the girl has lost.
Flow is smooth till end
Theme is good, As the girl is left with no purpose of life to live further, but she lives for her younger brother, which is definitely a positive sign.
Dear, come what may, one must live life to the fullest because it is a nice gift of god.
Good job and keep it up and take care of younger brother.
Conclusion: I really enjoyed reading it from beginning to end. I feel this is your personal experience, but always your surrounding doe not move the way you wish, then you need to change the directions of winds of your mind to keep pace with.
Suggestion: Repetition of words needs to be voided and I suggest to user some strong poetic words to make it more powerful. Akk the best and good job.
Title beautifully matches with that of ides of item.
Flow is very smooth from beginning to end.
Central theme is clear, which is darkness in our life where we roam What I feel here darkness means when our surroundings only negative, then it becomes quite difficult to look at bright things.
But any way we have to make our way to move forward.
CONCLUSION: GREAT NJOB. I REALLY ENJOYED READING IT. ALL THE BEST
Hi Sangeeta! Thanks for sharing this item on WDC platform.
REVIEW:
TITLE: Is good.
THEME: IS ALSO GOOD.
FLOW: SMOOTH FROM BEGINNING TO END.
Suggestion: Poem is short and find it difficult to give any final suggestion. Only suggestion, use of some poetic words would have made your item a good one.
CONCLUSION:If I am not wrong, the poet has rxpression her all frustrations ofm life she is facing. May be. But friend, never get fed up and frustrated by gthge people around you. Be what you are. Do what you wish and feel what you want.
Title: Ok and readable. Poem is short with deep heart actions and reactions.
Theme:
As a reader, I find that two hearts are coming close together, with sweet sensational feeling, to display their love by way of kissing.
Suggestion: In such a short poem, I find it difficult to suggest anything. However, some beautiful and romantic words might have been give some room since it's a love poem.
Conclusion:
Good job. All the best and keep your writing always. Thanks for sharing your loving kiss.
Theme is good with soft beginning with example of phoenix. Phoenix is a mythological bird which originates from its ashes, articulating inside beauty. The poet mentions even the farmer may not know what is sowed, and further says how beauty takes bathe in refulgence.
CLARITY AND FLOW:
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Poem needs more clarity to force its readers to read the lines more than once. Flow is good but first part lacks, as understand, connection with last part.
Last part reflects the departure of old and beginning of new era.
SUGGESTION:
Though poem is very short, but beginning and last part needs to be connected with each other. Use of some poetic vocabulary could have made it more attractive, which is a vital device for a poem.
CONCLUSION: Good job. Good efforts. All gthe best and thanks for sharing.
The writer has mentioned all about a monster and a devil, who is now a goddess of hell, wishes to be worshipped on earth.
The so called monster or a dragon seems to be curious to land on earth to rule the earth by force.
The story is very short and ambiguous. Its reader may not reach the central idea of it, and may not reach till end.
Title is not impressive. Theme not clear. Flow not on right track.
SUGGESTION: Length should have been long. Use of impressive vocabulary words. Theme needs to be strong. Connection among beginning, middle part and end is missing.
ALL THE BEST AND COME WIH SOME GOOD THOUGHTS AND IDEAS.
Thanks for sharing,
REVIEW
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Really, it's a fun time, if you have guts to enjoy, before you close your tired eyes to dream your day dreams. The writer has exactly poured his ideas inn this short article.
As a reader, I like it. It seems the writer wishes to find a song, but with the help of some dead soul.
The writer has added so many names in this article, which is not the requirement from any angle. Rather some funny night ideas would have taken place. Any reader may find it a boring one to read iy till end.
Suggestion: Length could have been long with some good vocabulary words to make it more readable and eye catching to every reader.
CONCLUSION: Good start but poor finish. Flow is missing. Theme not clear. Title is good, but without leaving its impression in the mind of a regular reader.
ALL THE BEST AND NEXT TIME WITH SOME BEAUTIFUL NIGHT THOUGHTS. THANKS FOR SHARING IT.
THEME: As a reviewer, I find the theme going on right track. Writer has mentioned the heart feelings of her demised father who was laid down to rest in peace.
TITLE:
Title is good and the poem seems a tribute to her lovely father on father's day.
CLARITY AND FLOW:
As a reader, I sense the flow is smooth and clarity exists.
POINT THAT IMPRESSED ME THE MOST:
"Please, have no worries and no sorrows.
Just happy memories of all your tomorrows."
These two lines reflect the how a father, who is no more, wishes her daughter to forget all sorrows and pains and enjoys the coming tomorrows.
SUGGESTIONS: Use of some strong poetic words could have made it more powerful, which is main bone of any poem. This is only my suggestion.
CONCLUSION: Flow is smooth, message is clear, ending is good. Good job. All the best and keep your writing tempo always up above the dreams. Thanks for sharing the content.
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REVIEW OF DADDY'S FIRTST LESSON:
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MAIN THEME: As a reviewer I find the theme is good when a father makes a would-be-father to get ready to welcome a new member in his life. He teaches his son how to use a diaper on new baby
FLOW: Though flow I find is good, but in the middle part it is broken. The writer could make the flow more attractive and funny so that its readers are curious to read it till end.
FUNNY PART THAT IMPRESSED ME:
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"This fold goes here, and this one there,
He tried to be so neat.
But everytime he held up Dolly,
The nappy fell to his feet."
SUGGESTION: To be an honest reviewer, its my duty to suggest that the flow of poetry should be on right and clear track. If flow and structure is not strong, the readers may not read it till end. Also use of some strong poetic vocabulary is needed which i the strongest aspect of any poem.
good job. All the best and keep the tempo up,
REVIEW:T
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THEME OF ARTICLE: The writer has endeavored to highlight the relations between father and a daughter, a daughter who never has been loved and pampered by her father. As a reviewer, I understand the writer has expressed her worst experience with her father, which indicates bitter experience and bitter relations between parents and children. For such relations reasons might be many, but the main reason is the lack of proper attentions from parents to children when they really need it. The reader will find the article an interesting one.
FLOW OF ARTICLE: Flow is very smooth and interesting. It binds the reader from beginning to end. Middle part is worth reading and considering.
MAIN POINT THT IMPRESSED ME MOST:
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"I'm writing this through tears of frustration, anger, confusion, and bewilderment. I know you don't show your emotions, but my sincerest hope for us is to open the lines of communication and REALLY TALK!"
This last paragraph impressed me the most. Here the daughter has invited her father to open the doors for the new beginning, which is a positive sign to rebuild the lost and broken relations.
SUGGESTIONS: In some places harsh words and feelings have been expressed, which might have been avoided. This is my personal opinion as a reviewer.
CONCLUSION: GRTEAT JOB. FLOW IS SMOOTH. APPROPRIATE WOIRDS USED.
ALL GHE BEST AND KEEP IT UP.
as a reviewer I always find it very difficult to give my views on such short content.
writer wishes to express her girl friend has left him. Every man faces this situation in life. Feeding a girl friend with your hard earned money is nothing but a great foolishness. Friend all the best to have such an expensive girl friend.
SUGGESTION: Have a girl friend who can feed you with her father's black money.
THEME: As a reviewer, I find the theme good where a little and innocent girl seeks her destiny on the sea beach. A sea lover reader will certainly enjoy the words used here.
MOST INFLUENCIAL DERSRIPTION: Metaphorically speaking, nice use of words showing see creatures and sea foods and their life on sea beach.
BODY OF POETRY: Middle body of poem is impressive which reflects main thoughts of a poet. Reader may find some new words in this poetry, which is a good indication.
SUGGESTION: To be an honest reviewer, my suggestion is to highlight, if possible, the basic nature and character of these sea foods and creatures to make the poem more interesting.
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REVIEW:
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As a reviewer, I feel that the writer has dedicated this poem to his wife on her retirement as a teacher. Feel very happy that the writer has poured his love and affection through this poem. The poetry itself tells its reader that a husband loves his better half to an extent which never ends.
THEME AND TOUCHING PART OF POEM:
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As a reviewer, I find that the theme of this poem is that to show one's everlasting love for his life partner has no age barriers. Middle part of the poem tells about the moral duties of a teacher to teach its students such lessons as will enable them to since like sun and throw their lights all over the globe. Its reader will be impressed by these few liners.
MOST AMAZING LINES:
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"They will burn brightly and their light will touch many
Partly, because they were given the right stuff by a teacher".
OF COURSE, IF A TEACHER IS ABLE TO PROVIDE GOOD STUFF TO ITS STUDENTS, THEN STUDENTS CERTAINLY WILL FLY HIGH UP IN THE SKY LIKE SHINING STARS.
SUGGESTION:
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While submitting my this review, I need to be an honest. A prudent reader may not find it easy to understand the theme of first few lines. Beginning part of the poem should give a basic idea the poem is all about. I suggest the writer that beginning of any poetry must create curiosity and inquisitiveness in its reader.
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