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Review of Late Dinner  
Review by elephantsealer
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Rated: E | (3.5)
"Late Dinner" is a little funny episode of a "leaping cat" as it slid toward a woman and her cup of tea, a "tipping" chair "on its back", and a cat crashing to the floor, taking with it a cup of tea... And this is just before dinner... It is a funny, little episode that kept dinner to be late.

It is an episode that brings a smile as I read. And at it happened at the time the husband came home, expecting dinner. Funny and something to smile about. It is a nice little episode that tells us that the author is very good at writing "flash fiction".

It is an admirable, short tale that makes us realize that there are writers who are quite good at writing short episodes of tales. I believe it is an admirable practice that an author can write something short that gives readers a chance to smile.


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Review of Not Even Death  
Review by elephantsealer
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Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
"Not Even Death" is short and to the point; a revelation of a past that was ugly and a memory of "ugly wounds" that brought "ethereal light, faint and pale". It is a revelation of "ugly wounds" from the past.

When memory breaks down and bring old hurts to the fore, there is a tendency to feel fear; to remember "ugly wounds", and to try to "scream" a way out of the haunting and broken remembrance.

Short and to the point; although it did bring to the fore the memory of "ugly wounds".

Remembering becomes an ugly thing of the past; and when a memory is of a past and ugly thing of the past, there is a tendency to write it off, as in the past.

This is a short narrative of death; of the end of "ethereal light" as well as the beginning of remembering of a past hurt. There is a tendency to try to forget; however, the memmory is such a hurting past, that the tendency is to try and try harder to forget.



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Review of “ I WALK “  
Review by elephantsealer
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Rated: E | (3.5)
"I Walk" is a short "spiritual" confirmation in one's belief in Jesus. The author's strong belief in Jesus Christ tells of walking "with Jesus" and in believing that "Jesus" is the protector from "harm and danger" as well as finding "peace to my soul"; and that Jesus means "I will not stumble" in life. It is an outright belief in Jesus.

In many ways, the author confirms a solid belief in Jesus Christ; as well as a trust in Jesus Christ as a protector "from harm and danger", and a confirmation that Jesus is "the light" in "my way".

There is trust and a strong belief in Jesus in this short "walk"; and in believing that Jesus is "the light" in the author's way.



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Review of THE ACCEPTENCE  
Review by elephantsealer
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Rated: E | (3.5)
"The Acceptance" tells us about the "full of emotions", such as "joy" and "pain". This is a short narrative of what life is as per the author; that there is forgiveness; that there are "situations" where doing good or doing bad things are a necessary part of life; that we "have to accept the fact that, the person we love is not here just to love but he is the one who can make us more stronger by hurting us."

I would like to mention a few errors, though, such as: a comma should have been placed between the word, "basis" and "we"; between "hunger" and "we"; between "anger" and "we"; a comma between "sadness" and "we"; and a comma beween "people" and "sometimes"; all on the first sentence. The word, "ourself" should be "ourselves" on line 7; on line 8,the word "heart" should be "hearts"; also on line 8, "more stronger" should be "more strong".

These are little things that need to be corrected for the sake of good writing. The author has written something that may become a reminder to us all that we need to be more aware of what we are writing, especially if we are to submit it to a publication.


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Review of Any Longer  
Review by elephantsealer
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Rated: E | (3.5)
"Any Longer" is brief and to the point: there was the passing of a loved one; and the memory of the one who is left behind. Death is something we face; a part of life that we try to understand. And yet, it is something that we do not understand, at all. When we are left to realize that we are left to walk alone, without the one that we love so preciously; we question "why"? We learn, somehow, to look at the reality of death.

And still we are bewildered.

In the finality of a life, we are left to ask questions that have no answers. We live on - on the edge of pain; on the edge of life. We try to understand. Still the reality of it all is: death is with us...


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Review of God Is Still Here  
Review by elephantsealer
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Rated: E | (3.5)
As I read "God Is Still Here", I realize that the author must be one of millions of people on earth who believes in God; and I really admire the author for frankly telling us that he is one of those millions of people who believes in God.

As human as we are, and even as we look at the humanness of us, people, we come to realize that our belief in the godness, goodness and greatness of a God would actually make a difference when it comes to the steadfastness of our belief in a God. Yes, we do make mistakes; yes, we do fail as well in doing that which is right and good; however, we have that great belief that there is this God, our God, all the people's God, who will make things right, and make people remember that God is God and all we need to do is BELIEVE; BELIEVE in God's love to and for us because we are children of God.



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Review of Hoarding  
Review by elephantsealer
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Rated: E | (3.5)
"Hoarding" seems to be the first in people's mind before a big storm. People practically abandon reason and thoughtfulness when anything out of the ordinary happens: a big storm, earthquake, flooding, even a small thing as a day-long rainfall. People have learned to buy practically every thing when and if something like a big storm occurs. Why do people "hoard"?

People have learned to buy almost anything when faced with a big storm, a fire storm, or anything at all that would give people reason to "hoard". Why? Does that mean that what we use every day is not enough to keep us fed or clothed or safe when something like a big storm occurs? It is madness.


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Review by elephantsealer
Rated: ASR | (4.5)
Bully for the writer of "A Peanut Butter Life", and for sticking to peanut butter, no matter how it was presented, whether in salad dressing, in a "hot fudge sundae, on celery sticks and even peanut butter with fruit. What's wrong with peanut butter anyhow? I believe, like the writer, that peanut butter is fantastic, even on its own!!!!!




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Review by elephantsealer
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
After I read and reviewed, "A Father's Day Confession", I must say I do agree with what the "father" did and say to his children after the dinner. It seems the children were just plain insulting and what the father did was just what the children need, to show how ungrateful they all were; and to do that on Father's Day!!!!!

There is always a piece of writing that really wakes one up!!!!!!!



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Review of Anna's magic  
Review by elephantsealer
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Rated: E | (4.5)
What a pity for Anna, to love to do magic, and to give up something that would have made her to become a proper entertainer.

Although Anna's magic made her brother "sick", it was such a pity her ambition was shot down, and terrified her, when her brother appeared "looking sick", after she uttered "some magic words". It was such a tragedy for a young girl whose ambition was to be a great entertainer. But then, it is magic,yes????????


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Review of The Crash  
Review by elephantsealer
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Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
"The Crash" is short and to the point. It is one way to write if a writer finds the loss of an idea, a thought, a dream at the moment of writing; short works are just as good as any that is long and wandering. It is something that writers do aspire to do, make it short but make it believable and to the point.

There are writers who are able to make short a long-winded tale; and there are writers who are determined to write long tales. Whatever their reasons, writers are conscious what they are writing about; how long they would do a piece, and/or how to write it short.


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Review by elephantsealer
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Rated: E | (3.5)
The tale of "Lily" as portrayed in "Beneath the Shadows" lifted my heart with hope. If "Lily" can change and become an inspiration to many, why shouldn't any person who finds herself/himself dwelling in self-pity become a new person? "Depression", the sickness that apparently took hold of "Lily" turned "her" into the town's hope: that "depression" can be a "sickness" that can turn a person into an inspiration if and when it is dealt with inspiration. It is such an inspiration when one's battle out of depression can turn a whole town of people to feel the "power of compassion and the resilience of the human spirit".

Stories of and about "Lilies" are such an inspiration; a power that sends people to understand and become the inspiration that makes a town to feel "the power of compassion and the resillience of the human spirit."

And so, as per the final words of this story, "Lily's story intertwined with the lives of many, a testament to the power of compassion and the resilience of the human spirit."



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Review of Cellar Dark  
Review by elephantsealer
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
When I finished reading, "Cellar Dark", I realized I was trying to understand the fear that arises when one opens a cellar door and nothing but darkness is viewed. People have different experiences when it comes to cellar and cellar doors. Then, somehow, it becomes obvious that there is a "boy" behind that cellar door, in this cellar.

"Fear", "paralyzing fear", becomes the emotion that faced "Jack" as he opened the cellar door. It gave "Jack" the realisation that there is another face, that of a "Jack" as he became numbed and aware that the other Jack has no place in the same world of Jack's. However, the other Jack "grinned pure evil" as he "Winked goodbye."

In the world of humankind, we tolerate the many inconsistencies that occur; and in the end we realize that our own world is as much an evil world as that of another human.



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Review of Nurse not there  
Review by elephantsealer
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Rated: E | (3.5)
The short tale of "Nurse not there" tells of one who was hospitalized for a broken leg, and was required to stay overnight. Awakened at about "2 am a nurse comes into my room and ask if I needed to use the bathroom." It became obvious the nurse was male, whose name was "John Walmore". Awakened in the morning on his way out of the hospital, the patient revealed to the "female nurse" about "John Walmore", who attended him when he needed the bathroom. It turns out, though, there was never a male nurse in the hospital with the name, "John Walmore". As per the author, the tale about the male nurse is true.

I do believe the patient did have a male nurse attend to his needs in the night. However, it may also be a dream the patient had as he slept through whatever "medicine" was given to him to help him sleep through the night. Possible, perhaps?




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Review of Publication  
Review by elephantsealer
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Rated: E | (4.5)
I truly admire the author who wrote "Publication" because his prime reason for writing is to "organise my ideas, to record my mundane activities and musings, to please myself, and to practice writing itself."

This author knows and feels that "unpublished works are wasted works bothers me often;" and I totally agree with his thoughts and truly agree that writing is one's own; and "puiblish whatever of that I feel is worthy of publication."

Writing is the product of a person's thoughts and an expression of a person's purpose to create, no matter how mundane the written works are. I totally agree with this way of thinking with regard to writing; and I most certainly agree that one's writing is one's own way of creating something that most pleases the writer herself/himself.


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Review by elephantsealer
Rated: E | (3.5)
After reading, "Why animals don't talk to humans anymore", I think one answer maybe: because humans have learned to be kind, loving, respectful, and intelligent. Humans have learned to care, to understand the many intricacies of living; humans have learned to be brave; humans have learned to be aware of the many little things that occur, physically or spiritually, and so humans have learned to be more reasonable. These are merely some of the small things that I can say that made a difference between humans and animals; although nothing in this little piece of writing has mentioned "animals" at all; although the title does mention "animals"...



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Review by elephantsealer
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Rated: E | (3.5)
It was fun and enlightening to read and review, "How to Tell I'm Writing a New Book". I see in the back of my mind a person in front of a computer typing as steadily as if there is no need for a period nor a rest from typing. My imagination takes me to the end of the piece of work, and like the writer, I find myself staring at a "blinking cursor".

It is a short tale of someone who writes. Or someone who really aspires to write. And we all, as writers, go through it: the wanting; the wanting more; and still there is nothing to put down on paper when the time spent trying is spent without actually producing something that is readable. Not that there is nothing to produce; the question is what to produce?

We, as writers, go through all of these little bits of listlessness; like there is nothing in our heads or imaginations or whatever it is we call the source of our thinking; zero as always because we are very, very sure we know we have IT!!!!! But why won't it come out? A question indeed that needs to be analyzed.

In the long run, we write. Not just anything but something from the heart, from the thoughts that fill the very heart of a writer. We produce; we write; and best of all we are writers.


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Review of Paghanga  
Review by elephantsealer
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Rated: E | (3.5)
In response to "Paghanga":


Kung tunay ang iyong pagibig,
Kung tunay ang iyong pagmamahal
Kung tunay ang iyong karamdaman
Nasaan ang tunay mong puso?

Just a bit of an idea that I thought may be a sort of a response to your lovely poem. In the meantime, do continue to give us more of the many ways "love" can be expressed in languages in different parts of the world. Tagalog is definitely a beautiful language, an expressive way to express one's need to say, "I love you". Tagalog has a heart, a mind, and a composition of many words that can bring together what is in the heart.

All good wishes,


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Review by elephantsealer
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Rated: E | (3.5)
A hug is indeed a beautiful day to make us feel good as per "How hug can make you feel". There are stresses and many more as we maneuver a day in our life. But then there are hugs that are just waiting to be felt, to make us feel we are writers, to make us realize that writing is indeed the right decision for the little things that give us incentive to write and write more...




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Review by elephantsealer
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Now that you have had a taste of how the "website works" with your "Hey just testing out this website", how about trying the "Technical Support Forum" or the "Non-Technical Support Forum" or just go ahead and create a piece or pieces of your thoughts within the pages of Writing.Com? You will be surprise how easy it is...

All good wishes,




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Review of Mirage  
Review by elephantsealer
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Rated: E | (4.5)
"Mirage" is a beautiful tale about "Albert", whose imagination brought him face to face with the "the feel of the planet Arrakis and he became, for a moment, the Muad'Dib - the leader of the Fremen, the avenger of his father, and the savior of a planet." This is a man's tale, one who knows how to enjoy a holiday in "the sterile landscape" as he imagines "that ripple of sand is the trail of a giant sandworm, the source of the spice melange."

How many people go on holiday, remember what they read many years ago, and "see a line of Bedouin nomads, crossisng the sterile landscape" and thinks of "Fremen" as darkness descends in the vastness of the land called Egypt.





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Review of "Eleanor Rigby"  
Review by elephantsealer
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Rated: E | (3.5)
"Eleanor Rigby" is a fun tale about writing. "Leannie" is "Eleanor Rigby", a writer of "pocket romances" as well as an author who is trying to write a "Nobel Prize" book!!!!!!! The tale continues about Leannie's hope to write a masterpiece; however, finding herself with "Insufficient funds" she met her friend, Penny, who advised her to write "pocket romance" so she is able to raise "a steady income".

This tale tells of "pennyless" writers; writers who are able to find a way to earn enough to feed themselves. It is a dark future to be a writer because the world of readers is only reading "pocket romances".

Should we now, as writers, choose to write "pocket romances" in order to have a "steady income" and to feed ourselves? I shudder...


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Review by elephantsealer
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello Jeff,

My submission for this contest is:

Dear Me - #2265110
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Review by elephantsealer
In affiliation with SENIOR CENTER GROUP  
Rated: E | (3.5)
"Fiona Needs More" is an interesting short tale about "Fiona"; interesting because the tale grabs a reader's interest. The tale creates a question that needs an answer; thereby keeping the reader wanting to know more... it is indeed a most interesting tale...





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Review by elephantsealer
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Rated: E | (4.5)
The loss of a mother is the topic of "December 6, I Buried My Strength!". Reading through this piece of work, I felt the loss like it was my loss as well. I felt the very cry from "my heart and soul" as expressed in this piece of work. Further, I realize the author's loss of a mother's "physical presence is and always will be missed in my heart and soul" because of his most sincere words, "I loved her and love her still!"

Mothers are the one and only guide and presence in our lives; and to lose a mother not only leaves us "alone" and without the strength that mothers provide for their children, but we also become a "lost soul" without a mother.


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