I genuinely enjoyed this piece. I always say mother knows best. I'm happy to read that in the end the young man listened to his mother, and they got out of a sticky situation and are unharmed and safe. Even though I'm sure the young man was vexed at the time. I'm sure in the end he was elated. I wouldn't change a thing. Lesson here is listen to your mom.
Thank you for the laugh, I needed that. I enjoyed your piece tremendously. It sounded so serious at first. I love the way you made it appear as if the couple stole something so expensive. Only to find out at the end it was donuts. I would not change a word. The dramatic effects were awesome and what a comedic ending.
I enjoyed your piece. I loved looking out the window and seeing snowflakes come down. Especially during the holidays. My family throwing snowballs at each other. Going sledding at the local park. Oh the good old days. Thank you for the trip to the past. Now, no more snowstorms, no more hot chocolate while looking out the window. No more Snowballs, instead it's the heat of the Florida sun, and hurricanes. Thanks again for the walk down memory lane. I wouldn't change a word.
I enjoyed your piece. It's joyful and melancholy at the same time. I truly hope that the person doesn't fall into the category of a beautiful tragedy. There are too many things in this world that bring us joy. Butterflies, sounds of birds, children playing, spending time with family. Although it makes me somewhat sad, I wouldn't change a word.
I enjoyed your piece. I don't believe in luck, rabbits' foot either. I believe in you live your life to the fullest. You never know what will happen the next moment or day. So why worry? You decide your own fate. Pick, choose, good or bad. You deal with the consequences. I wouldn't change a word.
I enjoyed your story. I work as a head custodian in a school i my area. So, this hit home for me. It's exactly how I expect my custodians to work. With pride and do it right. You have to have pride in your work. Especially working with children. The ending was unexpected, but it has quite a punch in the end. I wouldn't change a thing. It's said that my school was once an Indian burial ground. At times I've heard voices, or a person whistling. One of my custodians has heard sounds of someone hitting the hallway carpet on a railing, but no one is outside. You should check out my story called "Our Neighborhood Ghost. You might like it.
LOL. That last line was hilarious. I know exactly how she feels, I always think that the night ends too quickly for me. When that sun comes up all I want to do is put my blanket over my head. The story has a good flow. I couldn't help but picture myself in her place. This is exactly how I feel about my husband. He's my soulmate. I wouldn't change a thing.
This was so much fun to read. I figured it was a dog after a few sentences. Omg. That sentence about hiding the second sock was adorable. I found it so cute, I had to read it to my daughter. She loved it. It's on spot on how a pet would feel whenever they're left alone. Hmmm I've always wondered where the socks disappear to. It was a cute and loving small story. I wouldn't change a thing.
Aw so sweet and sad. I wondered why he was so unhappy on his birthday. He missed his older sister, but wow that hurt me when he called his mom old. 46 I mean 42 isn't that old. LOL. I'm 54 I guess that makes me ancient. LOL. How the young thinks? Here I thought he simply missed his sister. I should have known he only wanted her back to help clean up. Boys.. Kids you have to love them. I enjoyed your piece I wouldn't change a word.
I can't say enough in regard to your piece, there's not a lot of people out there that can do what the young daughter did in your story. I felt every anguish she and her father went through. Although she lost her mother at an early age and so tragically, she was able to keep going and help her father through his darkest days. Only shows how much influence her mother had on her. She has courage and strength that others older than her couldn't muster. Helping her father out of the fog of depression help get her father back for the abyss. I enjoyed reading about and meeting Lovely, her father and beautiful mother. I wouldn't change a thing. My only wish would be my own daughter have the will to go through what Lovely did.
Hi. I enjoyed reading your piece. As I read it I tried to imagine how it would sound as a song. You definitely told us your story. I can't wait to see what genre of music you will use. Let me know when you finally have it done. I would definitely purchase it. Keep writing. I wouldn't change a word.
Very powerful. I'm not sure but are you by chance speaking of alzheimer's. I worked with them when I was younger. And that is exactly how their lives appeared
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