Very interesting subject matter. I enjoyed it and the rhyme that popped in from time to time was nice also. I say the more gore the better! :) Good work!
Lovely! I love writing story poetry. I think with a few more stanzas to lengthen it out, it would be completely awesome. The abrupt end left you wanting more, but the rhyme was really nice. Good work!!
Well I really enjoyed reading this piece. It was dark and started off with good imagery, but the words throughout were great, they flowed well and I could picture myself there, that girl, and a smile crossed my lips and I thought, wow this is good writing. Thanks for posting!!!
Really fabulous unusual rhymed wording. I found it odd the way the stanzas did not conform or rhyme together completely, but the words, it envoked a vision of hazy pouring down rain and a tear soaked face full of loss and misery. Good stuff!
That's really awesome! I have tons of poems too ... the thought of being exposed and published is incredible. And to think that your poetry is sitting in someone's home as a gift to their loved ones, really super!
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