This is one of the most heart felt backings I have seen in a while and a well wrote article. I am very as you seem to be saying in this article very shocked at who he picked as a vice president running mate but at the same time I think they together will truly as you say pull us together as a true nation. Her as a vice president I think she will get what we need to get for health care sence she has a sickly child of her own and knows what we go through. I like how you spaced your paragrahs so that what you had to say could be well reseived. I would love to see more work on a article format basis from time to time. I think we here on site would like to sed well informed reporting on things that matter in the world on here. Great Job. Angela Michelle Adams.
I like this. But how ever you write it and pertray the characters when you look into it as inside the mind of the reader I feel that you can see in the mind it can be a human form that is talking or even be a animal. I think you could even develop this in to a anamated anilal cartoon thing. There atre many things I see in the ways you can develope this just from the way I read it. It is a item that I feel lets the reader take over in their mind anything that they want the character to be. If you mean it to be a spasific type character you might want to maybe use a different way of ewxspressing this if it is for something spasific that character form needs to be made clearer to the reader and a judge. Other wise I like it as is. Angela Michelle Adams. ** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only ** and ** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only **
Frankly I like this because it shows emotion in the charater speaking but I think you might want to watch your spelling and recheck that over. You show very good progress in the developement of what you write here and that takes a lot of practice I think in the way it is presented. You might want to make sure you put the rate where you wish it to be and see if it is well reseved at that rate. If it gets small reviews you might want to ajust it then to fit the age groups that read it. A peice such as this I think is very hard to really judge where it needs to be set at in the audance feed back that you will most likly get. As I said think on my ideas and act on what you think best for you. Angela Michelle Adams. ** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only ** and ** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only **
For a contest entry this is quite good for how you had to do it. However I do feel you need to set the content rating and the intro rating on this before you hand it in on the contest. After the contest however I think it would be even better if you could give more tedetail about the event it'self to let the reader see more clearly how others in the group also feel about the activity all on it's own. I think if you do that it would be a even more great work of writing and i think you will be surprised at the responce you get from other readers. Great Job. Angela Michelle Adams. ** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only ** And ** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only **
I am very surprised by this and I feel it is a great peice of writing even though I tend to understand what you are trying to convey here I do how ever think that some might get a bit lost in the discriptive part of the story. When I read this I myself get a bit lost in this part of the story. I am however not saying it is not a great story but you might want to tone down the discriptions a bit at the start of the story because It may be to much to some readers for the start of the story no matter how short the story was intended to be. Great Job In Any Event. Angela Michelle Adams. ** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only ** ** Images For Use By Upgraded+ Only **
This is very well wrote and for the detail in this you must have done a lot of investagating on your facts to get this to feel real to the reader. The ability to write things like this is quite hard to do and get such detailed information of The Native American way of life many years ago. A lot of the knowing of facts are being forgot. I like how you wrote this and made it seem so real. Great Job. Angela Michelle Adams.
I like this it is very well written and dialogged to a perfection that is easy to keep up with Not many stories that are wrote in this manner I can keep up with but this one I can. I think in places at the end maybe if you add a bit more you most likly can make this into something that could be made into a movie. it is only a idea that I think would work. But even I can missjudge what Hollywood would take. But I am only one oppinion, But for me I love the story. It also shows I think what it was like for people with a suposed disablity may havew put up with years ago and I think it should be exsplained to the world. I commend you for the job you did on this work. Great Job. Angela Michelle Adams.
This is a very well planed out Forum to ask questions on anything. I am pleased that there is a forum for non site worrisom questions and I also see it does not have to be just about things on site. I am very pleased about this forum and I may come back to it every now and again myself. I would like to say how ever you might want to put it at a higher rate if the questions get to a ratable stage where some of your forum visiters might be to young to view post at some point to be on the safe side. Great Job Doing This And Happy Birthday. Angela Michelle Adams.
I love this picture. i have been sitting here looking at it and wishing I owned a piano such as this. it brinbgs back a lot of memories of when I was growing up and at my cousins and every time we would go in my cousin who was a teen then would sit me on the piano stool and we would try working at getting me to learn how to play till her dad would run us away from it. in my oppinion in the picture you can tell it is a picture that was taken some time ago. I would recommend if you would want to improve the picture some to maybe post in papers to sale the piano you could p robly take it to a restorer of faded pictures and it might inhance it more to be seen better if you are woried about the detail of the piano not showing up well. I think you did a exalent job on the posting of the picture. Even my mom would love to have the piano if we could afford it but even she said a piano like that would not be in our affordable price range. But she says what it would possably go for it would be worth it to anyone who could afford it. And when my mom agrees with me that is saying something. Angela Michelle Adams.
I read this and I loved it. I do not see anything wrong with it. However I do feel the pain of the person saying the words in the poem that is wrote here. It has been a while sence I have read anything you have wrote and I miss your writing. I do have a idea for this poem however. I think you coluld start your own collection of love poems to be published starting with tghis one and others you have maybe wrote and not yet have in your port. Give it some thought and keep in touch. Your writing is missed greatly by me. Angela Michelle Adams.
This is very well maped out and I love the idea of doing a story like this but just not sure my writing is all that good. Some say I am good at getting my point told but my spelling grammer and punctuation needs a lot of work. I applaude you for setting this up for others to do. And I wish you all the best in your serch for the next best selling Author. Great Job. Angela Michelle Adams.
I am rating this very high because it is quite good but I have to addmitt it startled me a bit, the way your discription and detail in this are shown. You can almost see the things going on as if watching a movie. Not many stories I have read cause me to see the things going on in the stories I read but senery I have saw before as I read. This was quite different. The thging I would suggest is maybe uping the content rate a bit because thew sceens you discribe are very vivid. Great work in progress. Angela Michelle Adams.
I so loved the message in this poem and the fact it shows how when you get older you do not mourn it but you can rejoyce in the love that you have had in your life as a child and as you got older and the fact that you hold the memories in your heart as you look out side your window at your place and the window in your heart for all the things you have had in your life. When you remember that about life then and only then can you truly love life to the fullest mesure that god intended us to love life and the things around us that he created. That is what life is all about I think. Great Job. I look forward to reading more of your poems that you might do in the feauture. Keep up the great work. Angela Michelle Adams.
What a very good poll you made to find out what others think of the site. I Wanted to do the poll because I feel that you as a staff member needed to know exactly what I think of the site and this was a great way for me to exspress myself. However there is always room for improvement in anything anyone does. Specially for a site that is as big as this and is growing on a daily base level I think. If you would not mind I and in a private letter at a later date ans at your conveniance I would like to write and give you a few of the ideas I have? If that is fine by you. In the mean time Very Good Job. Keep up the great work. Angela Michelle Adams.
I read this when it was first posted in kit's contest and I loved it greatly. The way you allow the words to blend is great. Not many have that kind of talent for blend in a poem such as this was. I do how ever wonder how offten it can truly be put foreth in such a way as this was to make everyone understand this as I did. Very good job. Angela Michelle Adams.
Another great poem. After reading the other poem I just had to read and review this. I see a lot of acceptance in this of the things in life that others at times just realize just is. The thing that is so amazing is how the amazment in that is shown from the one speaking in this. Not many can bring that out. I see it more and more on here latly. Im glad that the acceptance God shows in each of us you brought out in this. That for me shows true understanding of God. Great Work. Angela Michelle Adams.
This is very good in a very comedic way. For me what makes it funny is the fact that is told as a story but also to as to be like it is a joke being told in a comedy club skit. I am not sure it it is truly meant to be that way or not but for me that is the beauty of it and what makes it so great. You done a marvalouse job I think. Angela Michelle Adams.
I give this a 5 because it is a well wrote story and I have read the book it came out of many times and still cry and laugh in that order when I read it or the book form it is out of. I do how ever think you need to make it more clear if your at your dads house or linda's dads working because it is not very clear if your in the room when he spots Lindas angel spirit as I like to call her. You need to make clear hoe her and your dads place tie in a bit clearer at some point. That part gets a bit fuzzy, Other wise great job. Angela Michelle Adams.
Well first off let me say I am not 40 and latly dread when I hit 40 but have to say it's not just older people who have a problem with getting anything to fit right. Being perportioned as I am and short I end up in the kid section at the stores I go in when I go because I am so hard to fit in anything. I have resently been thinking it might be better if we all went back to having our family make ore outfits for us. The hipe on having to fit in tight things just to look good is not to make us feel better about ourselves but to make the manufaturers poketbooks feel heavyer and more snug with our money on the things we can not really aford but have to have but end up taking back cause we can not ware it. That is the trouble not being size 5 or even 7. My advice just be glad it is not a size 16 or 18 you cant breat in out in the rain at a wedding like I did at my sisters second wedding and was soaked and the dress swank and cut my breathing in two cause it was soaked to my skin where it got so wet. It was a June wedding too. Angela Michelle Adams.
This is a well thought out item but when you write like this it helps to have exsperience behind this as you show in this. I have noticed that the rise in abuses are alarming now a days but can not help but think it has always been like this and was just never talked about. I do think that with a bit more work and a longger talk on this say with interviews with other people who have been abused you could help a lot more people not make the mistakes so many people make in a abuse situation. Just a idea I thought would help others. Good Job. Angela Michelle Adams.
When I read this i was took back to when I was a child and I had been abused and made to feel like I would never be any use to anyone or loved as if i were damaged goods and could not help but shed a few of my own teares for the feelings that come from these words. They are much how I felt then and a few years ago when someone gave me the courage to believe I was worthy of love. I am so greatful that someone is out there reminding even me in their writing that I am worthy and am lovable to anyone who will take me as I am. Thanks for sharing this with the world. It was needing saying. Angela Michelle Adams.
I do not have a autistic child but know a few who do. Yes to me you captured the feelings of the child and the parent I think. It has toi be fustrating in the childs mind that they can not convey for a time what they need or want or feel. the thing that I feel that is missundewrstood about this is that in some cases I think they can be helped and can be of use in the world and be perductive if they are worked with very hard. Like when they said I could not be helped and would never live past 2 but here I am almost 37 in a few weeks and going strong. My problem is a bit different but I still think there is hope for everyone who has a challenge to face in life. I think thats what this says. It is a way to say never give up little one. Thanks for showing that even when you think hope is lost it is still there in the mind of a child that never wants to give up. Angela Michelle Adams.
Well first off I love this for the fact you wrote it with such conviction in your words. The fact that everything you say is true here is why it needs to be publicly rated to maybe help others see the light of what can happen to themselves if they hit rock bottom in feeling sorry for themselves. Some forget others when they hit the botom and others do not. It is nice to see a story that shows also compassion in even one personn who will drink. Lord knows I in my life so far ever saw a kind drinker. It is also true that we get let to the wolves when we are deemed worthless and of no use to the world cause we are sick. It is not just the drinkers that get left to the side and it is time someone stop leaving us to the side on the back burner and time someone stood up to people that do leave us behind. I thank you for writing this and for once us having someone behind us its nice to see it. Great Job. Angela MIchelle Adams.
No words were ever wrote that were more true than this. To have life in harmony like the birds in this poem relates in my mind ofd reading is a far cry to how people live. If one stops long enough to realize the trancwility in just exsperiencing life like the bird without the grime of a hurried life one would be a lot happier I think. It is good that you remind us of that in this poem. Great Job. Angela Michelle Adams.
Much like the last reviewer I just reviewed you make me think of what this is trying to convey to others about the world and God's plan for us in life. In life I can look out the window and even latly I have to stop to wonder what God's Life plan is even for me. To me that rain in this poem is like I have always felt it was and that is that the Lord is saying I have tried to set things in yourt path to show you where I want you to go so to me the rain is the Lord's tewars saying why are you not listening to hear me in what I am trying to show you? I feel this poem is a reminder to all to listen to what the Lord is saying to us all. Great Job. Angela Michelle Adams.
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