i like the descriptions and the settings but after a wile i felt a bit confused, i don't know what to imagine when i think of it. this story i think lacks depth, even if it does draw the reader in. i feel like you are only skimming the surface, i know i am probably less experienced in the writing world but i know about reading between the lines and i read most of the story in between the lines, i am sorry but if you want reviews you have to take different views on this.
i feel you have touched on a delicute yet important issue in modern society, i have read the fact that one in three marriges end in divorce, but at the same time you use your amazing poetic and litterary skills with such care it almost makes you forget about the real issue you are dealing with. The only critisizm i have for you is the '!' appearing.
i love this! This is a bit emotional but suitable, the only, and i mean only, critisism is just for future refrance that the word elaborate has a lot of sillibles but i think you handled it very well in this and i admire your ability in poetry, i think you are talented!
you have created an intersting setting, way of life and view on humans that would be plausible, this is interesting yet i do not understand what ned is, is he a dog or an alien? This confused me slightly but appart from that minor thing, i found your litterary skills desirable and your work very appealing, you grabbed the reader with the first paragraph
i love this intro, it caused shock, saddness and greatfulness on the readers part. this is very powerful and emotionally you have captured the drama perfectly.
i personally think that in America sends too much aides to other countries such as asia and africa, i do watch news even though i am a bit young to understand fully but i am smart and don't live in the usa so sorry if i am an unworthy person to answer this question but these are my views and oppinions.
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