Alexi, oh what a wonderful poem. I had to read it a few times to really get it. But that's just me. Beautifully written and the content so good. There is nothing like waking before dawn and watching and listening to the Father's wonderful creations come to life. I think the poem was about the fresh morning thru the eyes of a person who cannot see described so well. Keep writing....
Well written and the description of the scene is spot on. You have put is all on a blanket at the lake watching whats going on and possible reading at the same time. The only thing I miss is the fishermen in their green john boats quietly waiting on the first bite of the day.
Thank you for writing this. I live at the beach on the Gulf of Mexico and I think I'll get up and go for a walk on the beach. Been a long,long time and I miss it.
Keep writing. This could turn into a beach novel very easily.
Yellow Rose, This is a beautiful short poem. I can't think of a single thing I would change.
I can also think of many people this could be uplifting to.
Keep writing just like this.
Misty
Beautiful. Well written and with special thought. I guess you could take it in many different ways but to me it is the beautify of the Holy Spirit living within us. I wouldn't change anything.
Keep writing
Stevie, this is a great inspirational poem. If it is a personal poem - congratulations. Very well written and sincere. It flows well and is easy to follow.
My favorite is " I'm no longer muted, scared nor dumb. One more year has com and gone It's another year to prove I won.
To me personally it speaks to the power and grace of our savior. Love it.
Great story. You have put together a really good mystery. You have a wonderful imagination. There has to be a way this guy can get out of this situation. Maybe you'll continue it.
I see nothing to coach you on. Character is nicely developed. The story moves along at a smooth pace. You have it flowing well. Very interesting content.
You really can't leave him in that place. He must get out by any means!!!!
Love this piece. I understand the point, I think. Times of depression come to mind. Very well written. Flows well and rhymes well. I did not notice any obvious things wrong. I Think you have put together a nice piece. Enjoyed it very much.
Keep writing.
Thank you for writing this poem. I love religious poems. Especially when the topic is referenced by the Word. You have put a great piece together. Your thoughts are well described and can be followed well. The rhyming is well and words chosen well
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Personally I like to read poems when they are written in stanzas. It's kinda of like new paragraphs and identifies a change in thought. Of course this style is great also.
Just keep writing about the wonderful living word of God.
I also like to make bookmarks out of these and give to friends. Or people the on my mind when the poem was written. Keep writing!
Brian, your poem is beautiful. You have described superbly the life of a lost soul in today's sinful and hopeless world. I enjoyed your work very much. It was very descriptive and honest. My heart goes out to these people. Your words were well chosen, the rhyming was on spot and the reader could follow the flow and your thoughts well.
I don't know if you are a christian or not, but it would have been nice to add a final stanza about the hope of salvation and a second chance through Christ. Just my opinion.
Very well done, keep writing.
Thank you for posting these instructions in story form. I love it. Been a member just over a month and still finding it difficult to get around in the site. I can see now I'm not the only one. I was beginning to feel techno challenged. You have shown that it is a trial and error style of learning. Congratulations for all of your accomplishments along the learning trail. Thanks again and keep posting what and how you learn new ways to do things like
how to save items and how to find a particular site once you leave it.
Keep writing!
Wow! This is a powerful piece. You have captured the true feelings of riding on a bike. It is a wonderfully free feeling. Especially in the mountains. I'm no professional writer but you have created a truly great work. I honestly can't find anything to correct. Spelling, grammer and content are all good. The poem is easy to read and flows well and is very discriptive.
How devestating to get the news from the Dr. My prayers will be with you and you know sometime God intercedes their decisions and works things out. Keep you faith and hope. My husband has had stage 4 neck cancer with about the same diagnosis. Here we are today. We can't ride the big bikes anymor because he lost so much of his muscle from his right shoulder and can't control the bike we had. But we have scooters now and still put around. Not as much fun but hey we are still on a bike. God Bless You.
A warm hello to all. I'm new at this and hope I'm in the correct location to start participating in the Senior Forum.
My name is Miriam Sosebee (Misty). I currently live in Gulf Breeze, Florida. Retired as VP of a financial institution and have been writing for a long time as a release from stress. Now I do it just for fun. I'm originally from Monroe County Alabama. Home of some of the greatest writers like Harper Lee and Truman Capote. Growing up in a small rural south Alabama town has given me some good inspiration for writing prompts. Have been married to my wonderful husband for 48 yrs. and that also has been an inspiration. No inspiration from work history, just stressful memories. Like most of you I have been around for so many historical events in our nations history. Some good and some not so good. I like to sew, garden, read (specially my bible) and go for long walks. Even though I live at the beach my heart lies in the mountains. I can get so close to God's glory there. I'm looking forward to the next chapter in my life and would love to share it with you. If I didn't put this in the correct place, do you suppose I'll get fired? Look forward to hearing from you and reading your work. Misty
Thank you StoryMistress for this very informative guideline. I've been looking for the best way to get to know everyone and here it is. As a newbie I appreciate these easy to follow directions. Hope to see you around.
Thanks Jeff for the e-mail instructions in Writing.Com 101. Your instructions are very simple and on point when reading. If you are technically challenged as I am you need simple to follow instructions. I think I can set up some folders and sub folders now.
Thanks again.
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